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    dots Submission Name: dearest tomorow lost in todaydots
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    Author: raptor?
    ASL Info:    16/f/B.C
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 173
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 852



    Description:
       meh, i just wrote that now ..bleeeehh


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    dots dearest tomorow lost in todaydots
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    my Dearest tomorow
    you give me hope
    your what makes me
    keep my eyes open
    your what keeps me
    facing foreward
    your my
    misterious beyond
    waiting in this great valley
    of yesterday

    and to my dearest yesterday
    who made me who i am
    you gave me everything i have
    and everything i don"t
    your my knowledge
    and my memories

    and so in between of
    what i want to forget
    and what i look foreward to

    today is where i am
    and today is what im feeling
    today is what guides me to tomorow
    so i can see another tomorow
    and have another yesterday
    today is what watches me
    so i don"t loose my way
    i don"t want to be lost in today





    Submitted on 2006-02-19 16:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very interesting. I didn't get bored. Good flow. The spelling and puntuation needs a little work but that's not what matters most. I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by KelseyJo | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! A love affair with the potential... groovy concept!

    I'd run this sucker through spell-check, it would do it a world of good.

    You've got a nice break in between your stanzas going, really gives a chance for the reader to take a breath and digest what you're laying down.

    I'm OK with the lack of punctuation, only because it doens't take anything away from the piece, but then again, it doesn't ad anything either.

    Cheers!

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]



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