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    dots Submission Name: For What It's Worthdots
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    Author: Cora Windover
    ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 862/763/204
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 765
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       just something I wrote for a friend <3 hope it works out, m'dear.


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    dotsFor What It's Worthdots
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    Are those your final words, my dear?
    I'm having trouble trusting you
    Believing that it's true
    Always wanted you to tell me all my worries were for nothing
    But it seems I'm never wrong, indeed
    It seems that I was right again,
    You're leaving me.

    Two long years without you
    A voice, a face, words are not enough
    Give me something tangible,
    Someone I can hold
    I'm waiting for you
    And I'm growing old.


    Are those your final words, my love?
    I always felt I loved you more than you loved me
    But now it's real and I'm left to bleed
    It seems that I was right once more,
    You're leaving me.
    For what it's worth I hope you find... love.
    In a way,
    It's going to be just fine
    As long as you're happy,
    Then I'll be okay.

    Two long years in another state
    How much longer do I have to wait?
    It's a guy thing, yeah I know,
    This physical yearning,
    Hell, I'm growing old!
    If you love me like I love you
    Then you'll let me go
    And we'll meet again someday
    On a vastly different road.


    For what it's worth I want you to survive
    I want you to be yourself
    I want you to fly!
    And if it means I'm hurting
    As I'm waiting
    Hell, that's my price to pay.
    And as long as you're happy,
    I can make believe that I'm okay.




    Submitted on 2006-02-19 16:20:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the ending. This was really well written, And i especailly loved the last line where you said "I can make believe that I'm okay" It shows how much one loves another when they're willing to bleed emotionally for another. Great job...Definatley belonging on my favs. list

    ~Cami
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sad but actually quite beautiful
    You are showing us your readers how strong and caring you are
    Even though it seems that the friendship has ended you still look at the positive
    BRAVO
    that is exactly how I live my life aswell
    I have a funny feeling this friendship is not over
    Your Love for your friend is too strong
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      damn, good stuff. everything is written well, the flow... well, it flows... and not only is there a good choice of words, but the feeling kinda oozes out... not too much, but a little. It gives the reader just a hint of the feelings. I'd try to choose some deeper words. Not to say the words you used aren't deep enough, but it lacks something... but then again, it could be complete and i'm just stating the way i see it. You pick..
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good Cora and it shows you are willing to sacrifice your own happiness for the one you love. Atleast thats what I got from it.
    Good to see you writing again, haven't seen you post in awhle.
    Keep writing and take care,
    !doc'
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i liked this poem a lot. that you would give up your own love and happiness for someone else's is a quality that most people don't have...because most people have never really been in love. i knew what you were talking about and the emotion connected to this poem, and i thought it was great. and the flow in the rhyme scheme didn't hurt either.

    keep it up and great job on this one.

    ~sabrina.
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by icaughtfire591 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I liked it. Quite a bit, actually, so much that I think I will favorite it.

    However, as wonderfully spun as it was, I did get a little confused. It seemed like you are waiting for the person to come back, yet...you want them to let you go. That is really the only thing that puzzled me, so other than that it is exceptional and I admire you very much for this stunning and lengthy write. I was eating it up, even though it was long. It was worth my time. Keep showing your feelings like this. I can guarantee you'll feel better...I do, at least a little bit. ^_^

    Thank you for the wonderful gift of feeling.
    Kichi
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Raging Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      *applause* *cora* *applause*
    ...i think in all relationships there are common issues that rises it head regardless of the people involved...I loved this poem beacuse i can relate to it and it depicts how caring females are that they'll risk there own happiness for someone else's...Waiting drains one feelings, patience, trust...
    " And if it means I'm hurting
    As I'm waiting
    Hell, that's my price to pay."

    Weeeeeeel done

    Keep spreading the love
    N*
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]


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