Description: yea... this just came to mind..... kind of missing something though... but i don't know what else... tell me what could be improved, but tell me what you think so far...
IRS -------------------------------------------
i fall apart
once again i brake
despite my heart
and how much it can take
everyone's gone
and here i am alone
no where to be
no place to call home
it's all winding down
and will soon fall asleep
no neep for frowns
no need to weep
'tis the price of life
that all must pay
and we will all be billed
come one day
because death is like the IRS
everyone must pay up
but the true irony
is that no one has enough
okay. FOr all those i confused, i am sorry. I have never been a victom of the IRS. I wrote this from the info my mom's friend told me. Sorry to all of you who didn't understand...
Ha, the last line is so true. Just a few things...
i fall apart once again i brake (break) despite the my heart (delete the 'the'?) and how much it can take everyone's gone and here i am alone no where to be no place to call home it's all winding down and will soon fall asleep no neep for frowns (neep to need) no need to weep it's the price of life that all must pay and we will be billed come one day (this line doens't match)
because death is like the IRS everyone must pay up but the true irony is that no one has enough
Brilliant, my lovely. I feel so horrible for you. It seems like this is a time where you can't really control what you say when you write. It just comes out, and you really don't have the will to change it. You have done this piece justice, and then some.
ironic enough, death is like the irs and the irs is the death of me. this year i filed "joint" on my return (having just got married) and the irs directed my return to pay off a gov. debt owed by my husband. it sucks but its like u said.. all must pay, right? heres my simple advise: stay out of debt. later.
Ah, my dear, again, the spelling errors and so on contracted so very much from the obvious terror of feeling!
However, like I have said before, this was a spectacular piece of work, and all that needs to be fixed are the minor errors I have pointed out in the past.
I hope that you are able to find some area of happiness in your life, and maybe we can go on that journey together. My own life has been stolen away, and I am also broken in two.
Submission Name: IRS
