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    dots Submission Name: You And Medots

    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is a poem about a reaccuring dream I have about Mylo...Anyways hope you like it

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    dotsYou And Medots

    She tells me
    "Theres someone at the door for you"
    And at the time I had no idea it would be you
    I run down the stairs to open the door
    To see you face for once and for all
    A suprised look takes my face
    Tears start to fall
    Our moment of silence was golden
    Until we met in each others embrace
    Thats when I was in heaven
    I knew everything I believed in was for real
    You were finally here with me
    That's when you whispered to me
    "I'm here and I'm never going leave"
    The thing I have been dying to hear
    Under the cold winter sky
    With a gleam in your beautiful brown eye
    You kiss my soft lips and tell me
    "Everything is finally alright"
    Thats when I wake up with a smile on my face
    And say to myself
    "Theresno need to cry everythings alright"
    Because I always dream of such things
    Like you and me

    Submitted on 2006-02-19 23:05:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont who mylo is, but this write is pretty good. a few errors here and there, but over all, it has a good feel to it.
    "To see you (your) face for once and for all"
    "I'm here and I'm never going (to) leave"

    besides these, the imagery was beautiful and very straight forward. nice job
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by onepieces | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good. You've really grown at writing thriugh this site I'm really glad u stuck with the site. I hope things with u and Mylo work out cuz don't like the other guy lol that shall remain nameless. Keep it up u r getting so muchbetter.

    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

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