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    dots Submission Name: My Lovedots
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    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 856
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is a Valentine poem for my girlfriend. Most of it is about what we've gone through. So don't think you'll understand everything. For some reason it doesn't seem as good as my other poems. Maybe it's just me.


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    dotsMy Lovedots
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    I saw you but I did not
    recognize you. You chose me.
    To show me a world I thought
    Was not for someone like me.
    The world of love, you showed me.

    You are the teacher of love.
    The student not fit for you.
    You taught me the ways of love.
    You taught me all through you,
    You came to unlock my soul.

    I want to give the teacher
    a present. I give my soul.
    You can hold it, search it, but
    please keep it with you always.
    Sad still? Not enough teacher?

    Her true love is out there still.
    The one who she learned love from.
    I will rejoin the masters.
    To see my teacher back home.
    Itís not time yet to see him.

    I see the darkness surround
    my love. My wings will protect
    you from this darkness. Until
    it's time to see him once more.

    I wanted to be your love.
    Even now you teach to me.
    Even in your silence. You
    show me that love is also
    a sacrifice. So be it.

    I will not be your love. I
    will be your guardian. I
    will be your protector. I
    will let you keep my soul until
    it's time to see him once more.

    Even though you are not mine
    I love you all the same. You
    have unlocked my soul of doubt.
    You have shown me that the world
    is more romantic than thought.




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 00:00:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this one. But I think that you should work on how you break the lines. Its somewhat choppy. But i like it. Thanks. I love you babe!
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]


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