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    dots Submission Name: I Wish I could Laughdots
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    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 269



    Description:
        NOTE: please just read through, it is just a thought, an excerpt from this poem, which unfortunately cud not be loaded fully onto this place. i'll be continuing this piece in near future.. bt for now njoi the Small Hint dat I leave 4 u...


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    dotsI Wish I could Laughdots
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    When I open the fenetre- wide,

    I find No place to Hide.

    For my cry is then heard- long,

    Like the day's enchanting Song.

    And I believe its a Truth - half...

    For I wish I could Laugh!




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 03:56:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, it's not bad, but I guess that you can do better because I can see in the words you use that you have the ability to write more solid stuff. a bit short.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Ant | [ Reply to This ]
      Curious what your secret message is in here, but if you take the first letters of each line it reads: WIFLAF which really looks like With Laugh or something. But I'm not sure if you meant that. lol.
    I think this peace is a bit to short to understand what point you're trying to make. Or was there no other than that you wish to laugh?
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this is too short.

    i thought and i thought and i thought...and i'm still puzzled...what is it supposed to mean?

    i think you should elaborate a little bit.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Mud | [ Reply to This ]


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