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"I"


Author: InnerEnergy
ASL Info:    19/f/sc
Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 12 /21 /10
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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"I"



I am me, YES what GOD chose me to be
I am FREE
Now wait don't you go trying to analyze
I look into the mirror and I see depth in my eyes
I am too deep to define
I am not a definition, I am not a WORD
But I am always HEARD
Close your ears and open your heart
I love the way I do me, I am such an ART
I am me, I am power-full
Never been self-centered
I've always ran into the door labeled selfishness
But I never entered
I just love when GOD shows off
He takes a solute and a solvent and gets a solution
Don't be confused by words cause they're clear
Its the language that plays with your mind
The solution begans here




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  *wow* this is really POWERFUL! i have experienced in life that there is nothing as liberating as knowing who u are and defining who u want to be in each moment of life...The contradictions that you used are catchy i particularly loved the following
"I look into the mirror and I see depth in my eyes
I am too deep to define
I am not a definition, I am not a WORD"
-THATS AWESOME!

Well written

Keep spreading the love
N*
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
  I understand, this poem is about loving, trusting, and accepting yourself for who you are. I know people who stare into a mirror and go I wished I looked more like such in such model or movie star. No matter how beautiful I tell them they are, it is them that needs to see it. About the poem it was clear and crisp. I would have liked more adjectives, but that is just the writer in me. I liked it. Your poem gets across one of the key points to happiness. Loving yourself.
| Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
  I see where you're coming from with this one. Very good. The only advice I have on this is try to be more descriptive. i I mean, you come across by this poem to me as a happy person. someone who loves life.
| Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not sure if you meant for this to be confusing, but when you wrote:

'Don't be confused by words cause they're clear'

Did you use 'cause' as a shortened version of 'because' or as a brother to 'caused'? I was just inquiring seeing as how when I read it, I didn't read it as 'because' but rather, as 'cause'.

Not to be a complete nitpicking fiend, but in the last line you wrote:

'The solution begans here'

Did you maybe mean to say, 'The solution begins here'

Not to be rude, I was just wondering, if not, just ignore the suggestion.

Overall, this piece was a rather good read. I'll look through a few more of your work to get a better idea of your writing style.

Kudos

Raven The Wary
| Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raven the Wary | [ Reply to This ]


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