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    dots Submission Name: The Things I Could Saydots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1038
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    Description:
       To Randall Allen Bowen and to Ambrosia Lynn Jacht

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    dotsThe Things I Could Saydots
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    If I said goodbye
    it means I'd never see you again

    If I said so long
    it means I wouldn't care

    If I said see ya'
    it would mean I'd see you tomorrow

    If I said I'd miss you,
    it means I'd think of you every day

    and if I said I love you
    it would mean more than it is

    For there is no farewell
    worthy of this moment

    There is no goodbye
    good enough for you

    I could say everything
    but nothing would make it right

    I could say we'll meet again
    but that's enough

    I could say goodbye my friend
    but that means your not

    I could say make me proud
    but you already have

    I could call you my friend
    but the truth is I love you

    I could call you my brother
    but the truth is you're a friend

    But I could say.....

    Farewell
    we'll meet again




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 13:31:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awww.. *tear* This was great. I like the way your use the "I could.. but" setup. I like how it goes back and forth. I just like it! I'm adding it to my favs! Thanks!
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the type of poem I could give to soemone I really care about, it was like you were speaking for me. I like how it doesnt really rhyme, but it was cute the wya you had it though. I hope to hear more of you later.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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