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The Things I Could Say

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
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Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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To Randall Allen Bowen and to Ambrosia Lynn Jacht


The Things I Could Say

If I said goodbye
it means I'd never see you again

If I said so long
it means I wouldn't care

If I said see ya'
it would mean I'd see you tomorrow

If I said I'd miss you,
it means I'd think of you every day

and if I said I love you
it would mean more than it is

For there is no farewell
worthy of this moment

There is no goodbye
good enough for you

I could say everything
but nothing would make it right

I could say we'll meet again
but that's enough

I could say goodbye my friend
but that means your not

I could say make me proud
but you already have

I could call you my friend
but the truth is I love you

I could call you my brother
but the truth is you're a friend

But I could say.....

we'll meet again

Submitted on 2006-02-20 13:31:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Awww.. *tear* This was great. I like the way your use the "I could.. but" setup. I like how it goes back and forth. I just like it! I'm adding it to my favs! Thanks!
| Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
  This is the type of poem I could give to soemone I really care about, it was like you were speaking for me. I like how it doesnt really rhyme, but it was cute the wya you had it though. I hope to hear more of you later.
| Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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