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Battles We Fought

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Started rambling, it's a little forced in my opinion but I don't think it's the worst I've written (that stuff will never be posted) Tell me what you think

Battles We Fought

I have to stay strong
but it's harder than we think
because all these years we've been wrong
and in this pain we tend to sink

All this time I've been wondering
if we were wrong it what we thought
Because all this pain has been thundering
and we haven't found what we sought

And for months we've been waiting
for a time when I'd be free
but that hope keeps fastly fading
perhaps it's not free I need to be

I keep waiting to be saved
but I've had it with depending
I just wish life wasn't waved
then maybe I could stop repenting

I know I have to stay strong
but it's harder than we thought
and all these years we've been wrong
but not these battles we have fought

Submitted on 2006-02-20 13:39:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This makes me wonder if you're going through some illness, perhaps? Perhaps you're feeling dispare. Anyway.. I like the write. Your flow was good, the emotion showed through and I'm huge on emotion isn poetry :) If you can make the reader imagine or feel, then you've got a good poem. And you nailed it. Good job!
| Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
  this was good

so many life situations make great poems
well done i'm glad i took time to read
will look for more of your posts
| Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  "and in this pain we then to sink"
*tend to sink?
should be then sink.. ithink :)

I like the ending.

:) :) :)
| Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]

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