What a lovely and poetic expression of how nature can help us in healing. The image of the parachuting snowflakes.. bearing down on you like a burden.. and how the sun-ray comes out, turning them into cleansing waters.. washing away the load..and renewing your spirit. Very well done Tiff. I enjoyed! ~Sandra
Oooh! I like this. Very nicely written and expressed and I just love the little parachuting snowflakes. That is a great description of how a snowflake falls through the sky! Can you picture them all with their cute little parachutes on? hahahaha! That brought me a smile! I like how your imagery really makes the reader see what is happening and then how you bring the ray of sun through the clouds to melt the snow that has fallen upon you, a sort of cleansing, a renewal! Very nice ending here. I enjoyed reading this one. But to be honest with ya, I cant wait for Spring! Take care.
I'm not a big fan of free verse. But, I really liked this one. Having lived in Okinawa and now, California, I've forgotten what snow fall felt like. However, your poem brought back the pleasant memories. Thanks for sharing.
Beautiful When I was in NJ for 2 months away from the negativity of California we had 30 inches of snow in one day The beautiful image of a lighted up room at 230 in the morning was really a sight to see It was sheer beauty By the way my poem Man Made Destruction was completely a reversal like you said of my normal writes I wanted to try and expand a little I am glad you liked it Be prepared for more poems that are a little different from usual from me If you get a chance take a look at my new post Liquified Dreams God Bless Ron
Wow, I know how beautiful the Sierra Nevada area is after snowfall. You put into words a lovely experince of how one can reach renewal through postivity. Your chose of word were superb. I liked the easy flow of this. It made me want to go out in the snow! But there is no snow in my part of Cali! lol. This brought a smile to my face and heart. Lovely write.
i can just picture you, arms outstretched in the snow. i love the image of the snowflakes bearing down on you and then the ray of sunshine melting them into healing drops of water... beautiful!
nature is such a salve for those times when we fell overwhelmed or depressed.. you are one of those nature children, like me, who appreciate the healing that nature can bring. glad to hear you are feeling better. i'm sending lots of love your way, sweetheart. you are precious.
Wow this is an incredible depiction of the power of nature, and all it takes is belief. I love the way you word it that you know there is another meaning to the weight bearing down on you and then it washing away. I enjoyed this poem very much great piece...
This is a gorgeous discription of being one with nature. I love this poem because when I go outside I try to feel like I'm a part of my surroundings in some way. This poem just flows and has a perfect amount of discription. Sometimes when I feel bad, I love to go outside and listen to the sounds of birds and trees. I just can't describe the beauty that your poem portrays. Keep up the terrific work. This is going on my fav. list. Keep me posted.