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    dots Submission Name: Reneweddots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       4-wheeling in the Sierra Nevadas in my little Toyota - wonderful snow storm. I had a rough week but the beauty and truth of nature truly renews me

    Love life!
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    I stand tall in the midst of the forest
    arms outstretched to catch the parachuting
    flakes of snow

    The flakes collectively cover my all
    and like the surrounding trees
    I am blanketed and bear down
    against the weight as if each flake
    were a burden

    A single ray breaks through the eerie
    silence of snowfall
    and illuminates me
    each flake now a drop
    of water
    cleansing me
    until all melts
    in the warmth of the light

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      From winter to spring

    Snow to water

    I love it when everything melts and everything is renewed

    Snow is a burden which I do not wish to bear. I hate when it makes things white and gets in my hair

    I hate it when I have to shovel, and when I have to bear this burden which I do not wish to bear


    This poem is spectacular
    Ventrical, venacular

    Aha! It's good

    Continue to write the good!
    Do not bera the bad!

    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely and poetic expression of how nature can help us in healing. The image of the parachuting snowflakes.. bearing down on you like a burden.. and how the sun-ray comes out, turning them into cleansing waters.. washing away the load..and renewing your spirit.
    Very well done Tiff.
    I enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooh! I like this. Very nicely written and expressed and I just love the little parachuting snowflakes. That is a great description of how a snowflake falls through the sky! Can you picture them all with their cute little parachutes on? hahahaha! That brought me a smile! I like how your imagery really makes the reader see what is happening and then how you bring the ray of sun through the clouds to melt the snow that has fallen upon you, a sort of cleansing, a renewal! Very nice ending here. I enjoyed reading this one. But to be honest with ya, I cant wait for Spring! Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not a big fan of free verse. But, I really liked this one. Having lived in Okinawa and now, California, I've forgotten what snow fall felt like. However, your poem brought back the pleasant memories. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
    When I was in NJ for 2 months away from the negativity of California we had 30 inches of snow in one day
    The beautiful image of a lighted up room at 230 in the morning was really a sight to see
    It was sheer beauty
    By the way my poem Man Made Destruction was completely a reversal like you said of my normal writes I wanted to try and expand a little
    I am glad you liked it
    Be prepared for more poems that are a little different from usual from me
    If you get a chance take a look at my new post
    Liquified Dreams
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      The cycle of life manifesting in snow, water and replenishment. Re-born, Re-invigorated, Re-born and RE-NEWED.

    Very inspiring as usual snow lady !

    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great as usual sounds like you are the adventurous type and you take the memory with you in words as this

    well done as usual
    hope all is good

    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I know how beautiful the Sierra Nevada area is after snowfall. You put into words a lovely experince of how one can reach renewal through postivity. Your chose of word were superb. I liked the easy flow of this. It made me want to go out in the snow! But there is no snow in my part of Cali! lol. This brought a smile to my face and heart. Lovely write.

    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i can just picture you, arms outstretched in the
    snow. i love the image of the snowflakes bearing
    down on you and then the ray of sunshine melting
    them into healing drops of water... beautiful!

    nature is such a salve for those times when we
    fell overwhelmed or depressed.. you
    are one of those nature children, like me, who
    appreciate the healing that nature can bring.
    glad to hear you are feeling better. i'm sending
    lots of love your way, sweetheart. you are

    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is an incredible depiction of the power of nature, and all it takes is belief. I love the way you word it that you know there is another meaning to the weight bearing down on you and then it washing away. I enjoyed this poem very much great piece...
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Kersofmia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a gorgeous discription of being one with nature. I love this poem because when I go outside I try to feel like I'm a part of my surroundings in some way. This poem just flows and has a perfect amount of discription. Sometimes when I feel bad, I love to go outside and listen to the sounds of birds and trees. I just can't describe the beauty that your poem portrays. Keep up the terrific work. This is going on my fav. list. Keep me posted.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by __symphony__ | [ Reply to This ]
      Awsome. Iv'e never seen snow before but you really made it feel as though I had experienced it before. Great job Tiff.

    Much love
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]

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