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    dots Submission Name: Do Great Things Last?dots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    19/m/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 111/84/44
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDo Great Things Last?dots
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    I feel like the coyote waiting patiently for the moon,
    And howl to see if it hears before it leaves to soon,
    Or better yet like the bear waiting for the salmon,
    As stiff as a statue with no emotion or fear,
    Until I can burst out when my catch comes near,

    And I know I will be ok as long as you are in my life,
    Whether it be friend, foe, or even wife,
    But without the chance to at least fight,
    My heart will be in the dark searching for a flashlight,

    All I wish is that I enjoyed more the time,
    That we would lose each other in our eyes,
    But those little qualities will forever be engraved on my mind,
    Her scent after a shower, her skin so soft,
    Even when she was sweaty or started to wine,
    Her smile with a style of its own,
    It even owned the power to steal my breath,
    What power what strength she has in a look,

    And now before us is our greatest task,
    To see if this greatness can truly last…




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 17:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That poem is really cool, and the imagery in the first stanza was amazing. Very vivid. This had a sweet quality to it. Very nice job:) I loved the line
    "My heart will be in the dark searching for a flashlight,"
    It's so original and funny, though I doubt it was supposed to be funny...I just love it...:)
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this was pretty sweet. Nice and simple, cool, and cut to the point. I like that line, too. It meant a lot to me.

    Nice write, and welcome to Elite.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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