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    dots Submission Name: Grade school chocolate heartdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Another Fat girl poem/ story thingy


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    dotsGrade school chocolate heartdots
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    Once again fat girl recalled one of her grade school memories. February 14th, love was in the air. Each of the beautiful people had a beautiful valentine. Fat girl knew that today is when she'd tell the beautiful boy that she liked him since grade four. She put a card with a chocolate heart in his locker, signed with fat girl's name. Beautiful boy opened his locker to his surprise. He look at the card in disgust, he tore the card up. He went up to fat girl and told her to give it up, that he'd never go out with her. He laughed so loud, it echoed through the halls, calling all the beautiful people to come and crowed around fat girl. She felt the red hot hand of embarrassment slap her hard across the face. Beautiful boy turned to his beautiful valentine and handed her fat girl's chocolate heart. She began to devour it right in front of fat girl's face, she laughed as she grabbed the beautiful boy's hand in hers. They walked away leaving fat girl crying in the middle of the crowd. Fat girl had her broken valentine.




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 17:26:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was so sad and so emtional. I could feel her pain as I read this and it's just so heartbreaking and gutwrenching to read about her situation. It evokes so much emotion in me. Great write, very few pieces can evoke this much emotion from me:)
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this was so sad. It made me want to cry. I know what its like to love someone and they dont give a crap about you. I hope this didnt happen to you or anyone you know. Greatly well done!

    mistress acaia
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by mistress acaia | [ Reply to This ]
      great write here im not a fat girl but i know how it is when u like someone and finally u get the courage to say something about it only to be shot down it hurts but what can u do
    i really liked the line "She felt the red hot hand of embarassment slap her hard across the face." anyway keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by cartoon autopsy | [ Reply to This ]
      Although there are quite a few spelling errors, this was still a really good read.

    I can sympathize with 'fat girl' and the embarassment that comes with liking one of the 'beautiful' people.

    Society has made it so hard for anyone larger than a size 4 to feel beautiful; to be seen as something other than just 'fat girl' [or boy]

    I definately enjoyed this piece, thank you for sharing.

    Kudos

    Raven The Wary
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Raven the Wary | [ Reply to This ]


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