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    dots Submission Name: The Seadots
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    Author: John Ratliff
    ASL Info:    21/M/OK
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 27/42/20
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 238
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 757



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    dotsThe Seadots
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    Well they took my little lady
    And they threw her in the sea
    It doesn’t really matter much to me
    She, it turns out, was whoring seven to three
    And she was pregnant without my baby
    Bitching constantly

    Well they took my little lady
    And they threw her in the sea
    They say she was a thief
    But she’d never stolen me
    It doesn’t really
    Matter to me
    You know she
    Bitched constantly

    Well you know my little lady:
    She is so clumsy.
    She got drunk, tripped,
    And accidentally fell into the sea
    You know it doesn’t really
    Matter to me
    Because she
    Bitched constantly

    © John Ratliff 2006




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 19:19:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it was alright but i think u repeated yourself a lot...like u used most of the lines more than once. otherwise it was pretty good
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by strwytohvn | [ Reply to This ]
      AH, I thought it was alright. I like "they took my little lady part" but at the end of each stanza ruined the flow. It just sounded odd and it didnt fit it. But other than that it was pretty good.
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]



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