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    dots Submission Name: Musingsdots
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    Author: Mr_Eff
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 61/62/39
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       Just a piece of something on my mind. No real answers, sad to say. Just venting.


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    Something wicked this way comes
    It's been feeding off of hate, poluted water and stale crumbs
    Lately it's been rethinking it's position towards guns
    Because my belly is getting empty, and I've depleted all my funds
    I sold my house of flying daggers, so eventually you'll learn
    I used the cash for lots of bullets addressed to "whom it may concern"
    So, stand in line, the richer, the quicker I call your number
    Hey, lights out for the white house, starting with dumb and dub-ya-er
    It's really no surprise they'd do us for a nickle
    It's no surprise their lies have turned me into Travis Bickle
    What really blows my mind away, is that any given time of day
    The system ups and rapes us, while we wait in fucking line to pay
    If the people have the power, we went and gave our spine away
    With no backbone, I envision the blind leading the blind astray
    U.N.I.T.Y. is non-existant
    Does the message matter, if nobody's going to listen?
    We suffer a condition, it's become quite a restriction
    We use all these fancy words, but not near enough conviction
    How bad does it have to get, before we finally scream "No!"
    Calmly into the night, is not the way we choose to go!
    You want to take away my rights? You best be prepaired to fight!
    Which might leave you strung up, swaying in the wind, like a kite
    The fish will no longer bite, at the dirty worms you offer us
    But, there's too much seperation, so those last statements are preposterous
    What is it costing us? Are they really brain washing us?
    I believe we're content to accept the shitty scraps they're tossing us




    Submitted on 2006-02-20 21:06:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice line - "As a collective, we suffer from a condition
    We use a bunch of words, but not near enough conviction"
    The way your rhyming it, is really creative. Your perspective seems a little bitter but realistic.
    "If the people have the power, we went and gave our spine away
    With no backbone, I envision the blind leading the blind astray"
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      What really blows my mind away, is that any given time of day
    The system ups and rapes us, while we wait in [censored] line to pay
    If the people have the power, we went and gave our spine away
    With no backbone, I envision the blind leading the blind astray

    i thought this one was ok. these lines were good and i liked the line about the house of flying daggers too. that was a pretty tight movie. i'm glad i got to read all of ur work and i hope for the chance to read more in the future.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      very good! loved it! it had a lot of descriptive language... that made it come across very smooth. i'll be looking into some more of your poetry. great work!
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]



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