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    dots Submission Name: Thoughtsdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Thoughts of you
    persist in my mind
    adhering to every convolution
    like paralyzed flies
    glued to flypaper.
    Thoughts of you
    pollute my consciousness,
    bleed my joy,
    color my mind's eye
    with the dead-bug brown
    of my macerated soul.

    Submitted on 2004-01-19 12:49:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      macerated.... whooeee, that's a word and half! Very powerful write, cuddle. Almost total resignation, with just a hint of "fight" left in it. Just a teeny sense of "You [censored]." Excellent. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your descriptive style. It's a joy to read...
    | Posted on 2004-01-20 00:00:00 | by hopefloats | [ Reply to This ]
      your a very powerful writer.. i love your knack for description
    | Posted on 2004-01-19 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]
      You have got your message across with very few words. Excellent imagery and great word choices.
    | Posted on 2004-01-19 00:00:00 | by oneLdamnit | [ Reply to This ]
      *nods* I like your imagery... And I can easily understand the message of the poem. It sounds as if you're quite angry about something.. Good expression. That's what a poem's all about :)
    | Posted on 2004-01-19 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]
      abit powerful i'd say, none the less good though. its simply telling what you cant get rid of know matter what you try, or thats what i got from it. good wording, good poem ~Trystam
    | Posted on 2004-01-19 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]

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