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    dots Submission Name: This Afternoondots
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    Author: Nobantu
    ASL Info:    22
    Elite Ratio:    6.81 - 352/237/58
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 354
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    Bytes: 1075



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       Letting go and finally cutting the umbilical cord with a soul so dear but not meant for me!!!


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    dotsThis Afternoondots
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    Today I sat in silence
    Attempting to put
    Our relationship into perspective
    I contemplated
    As I always do
    Searched for substantial reasons
    Why I should
    Continue holding on
    To something
    That one of us
    Is no longer feeling
    Perhaps you have forgotten
    That I have no issues
    With doing my thing
    By myself
    I am all I've ever had
    If you leave me
    It’s not a big deal
    But if you continue
    To terrorize
    My already fragmented heart
    That to me beloved
    Is a very serious offence
    Remember you came to me
    You asked
    To be with me
    Though I knew
    Intuitively that
    You were not ripe
    I threw myself
    Into this ordeal
    This afternoon
    I sat as in many
    Other afternoons
    Promising myself that
    Never again
    Will I let another
    Being hurt me
    This way

    However this afternoon
    I am leaving you for good




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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds like a truly sorrowful relationship (or lack thereof) with an individual not ready for commitment (not 'ripe') that you hoped would mature in time (and obviously has left you many afternoons to ponder the value of a one sided affair). If the last two lines are truly how you feel, then perhaps the time has come to devote some time to yourself and catch the ripe fruit when it drops in your hand. Nicely done. Take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]



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