Description: just a little something I thought you might like to read if you happen to believe in Ghost
Ghost of the Towers -------------------------------------------
Lady Grey and Guiford Dudley to the towers you did go
Having coveted the crown that only brought you woe
Had you not of listened to the people of the town
You'd not sat with heavy hearts and frown
For your appointment was found to be disgracing
And the chopping block you were soon facing
To Beauchamp Tower 'tis there Dudley sat to wait
To Tower Green the Lady Grey awaited her fate
Surely your nerves was greatly taxed
While the executioner sat gringing his axe
For up in the towers sat two lost souls
Knowing soon their lovely heards would roll
'Tis said your spirits haunt the towers
Dudley's is heard weeping in the early morning hours
And yours my Lady is often seen walking around
From Tower Green to Salt Tower high above the ground
As one famous person once said... I don't believe in ghosts, but I am frightened of them. I'd have to say the same thing. Frightened maybe, because we really don't know...
Your poem tells the story of ghosts, but there is little imagery used to describe the situation. I thought this was quite good, but you could do more to make it spookier, especially in the last two lines.
This is a very well written piece but I can't say it was one of my favorites. It lacks life... what i mean is that even though you talk about such things as treason and death... things that usually come with a high dose of emotions, there seems to be no feeling behind it. almost like you wrote the piece for a class and didn't put very much effort into it beyond making it sound good. i'm sorry if it sounds like i'm being overly critical of your piece but this is a writing critique site and i'm only trying to be fair so we can all improve our writing. keep it up!
This is a good write I like the way it is spoken I will say however that I have read some of your other writes that are much deeper I am NOT saying this is a bad write thou Your writes always carry a readers mind into thinking God Bless Ron
I won't be so brutal to you dear. I do think you need to add some heart to this. And choose to speak as a narrator or let the characters be first person. I think you could of added more to this and expalined why these things befell thw two. I would say she would be the one mourning and he walks the grounds. The flow was good, till you got to the end and I think the rhyming was a not as good in certain places. This is ripe for revision. But I loved the history and the fact you wrote about these two. Very nice, needs improvement.