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    dots Submission Name: What is Love?dots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    23/m/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.48 - 116/89/50
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1203
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 467



    Description:
       This is actually the first poem I ever wrote when I was about 14. I was questioning because it seemed like such an easy word to say in grade school but I wondered if anyone knew what it really was. I still very much enjoy it I hope you will too.


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    dotsWhat is Love?dots
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    What is love?
    Is it something you seek
    like a sacred dove,
    or does it make you weak
    at its climax or peak?

    Does it take your life,
    or does it leave you with a loving wife?
    I dare not define,
    because it changes with every different mind.
    Can it be lost when it is so hard to find?

    Does it put you in a bind,
    or do you have control?
    What is love and how would you know?




    Submitted on 2006-02-21 07:28:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Damn, and thats all i can say cuz i'm [censored] speachless.
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a real gd poem... I know which I am lol
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by Henry666 | [ Reply to This ]
      For this have to be written by a 14 year old is very good. I love to read earlier writes of people and then read more current ones. This was a very godo write indeed. I'm going to go read some more of your work, get an "flow" for you going :) Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
      For it being a poem from your youth, it's quite good. I love to read pieces and then try to guess the sex of the writer.

    When poems come out to be about love, and convey a deep interest, I tend to invision a female artist. -As was my mistake in this case.

    I commend your sensual approach to love, it's refreshing to read male-driven poetry, I wish more men wrote as you did then.

    I'm adding this to my favorites.

    Kudos

    Raven The Wary
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Raven the Wary | [ Reply to This ]
      am not pulling u down or what, but there is a line that just does not fit (to me)-or does it leave you with a loving wife?- i mean this ought to have something better other than a forced rhyme. by the way at times u do not really need rhyming words, as long as the rhythm is there. but i like the subject of course( who does not?)

    another line was -ike a sacred dove- cdnt it be for example, something u gotta have... i mean..

    however i agree about the climax and weakness at the same time, i read a quote saying that to love it to be vulnerable. good poem but i think u can make it better. go for it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      &#61514; I have written my own takes on love including A Silent Fall From Broken Wing which you can take a look at if you want and since I have not had great experiences with love my own views tend to lean toward the more negative side of your inquiry. This is a very good write. You could actually make a few poems branching from this one. Great I am glad I read this one.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by SonAsylum | [ Reply to This ]


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