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    dots Submission Name: Welcome Grace Fletcher(Niece)dots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsWelcome Grace Fletcher(Niece)dots

    Ive held the joy, and danced with a lady,
    shes never spoken before, cuz shes just a baby,
    Feels Light in weight,
    and with beauty to measure
    She will have likeness to be clever
    With each trait
    Inherent from her mother

    Giving gifts of toys, as she learns to see
    Hopefully never boys, if god will let it be
    Little Grace is her name
    With her smiling face coy
    Im delighted to embrace her joy

    Submitted on 2006-02-21 09:01:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the way it was written. I got a lil teary eyed. Not because it's late but because with just the few words you wrote, it touched me. I really love it!
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by Princess37 | [ Reply to This ]
      like i been saying,some of your best work yet,your real good at the poetry man,honestly one of the most meaningful works you have put together,when shes able to read you should show her this man no doubt..hit me back
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by PROlifik | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a lovely tribute to your niece, you took every bit of inosence and described it perfectly, i love ' ive heald the joy and danced with a lady'
    even though she is just a baby, i can tell you think the world of her,
    thanx for shaing
    x x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty touching. the last two lines in the first stanza kinda threw me off at first but after rereading it, it sounds alright. this was really cool and it's good that u feel this way about ur niece.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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