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    dots Submission Name: The Pearl of Tomorrowdots
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    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 823
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    Description:
       this piece is a bit old. actually wat made me put it here was that this piece of poetry was the first write that was published in a local magazine, then newspaper and then my school magazine.
    i got many accolades 4 dis piece. i simply love it!
    the following write is self xplanatory.


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    dotsThe Pearl of Tomorrowdots
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    One day, A Boy was born,
    At the time of breaking dawn,
    With a glimpse of shine in eyes-
    With lots of laughter and with cries.

    fascinating was his first little touch,
    Held nobody with no such grudge,
    So much was he filled with innocense-
    that made everyone feel his presence.

    At the age of Eight,
    God completely changed his fate-
    He now knew, he was alone
    And had to live by his own.

    How could he ever realize?
    For what did God penalize?
    He had done nothing wrong,
    For he knew he was Bold and Strong.

    He now knew, he had to do something-
    had to show the world, he could do anything.
    His dedication was heart- rending-
    What he became is worth- commenting.

    He wrote, he studied..
    And he completely changed his Fate.
    His Life was Now, not of Sorrow...
    As he became the Pearl of Tomorrow...




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      i really like it. Its a good write. I like the rhyming scheme too. Good job



    ~sweetme
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]


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