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    dots Submission Name: Appreciate Itdots
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    Author: wildchild
    ASL Info:    19/f/northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 307/268/27
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Just a little thing I came up with while sitting in class....


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    dotsAppreciate Itdots
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    Have you ever sat in the mountains
    to listen to the trees?
    Ever heard a little bird's song
    that sets your heart at ease?

    Have you ever stood inside a stream
    only to feel it's flow?
    Does it really take that much time
    to help the flowers grow?

    Have you ever gone outside
    to simply feel the breeze?
    Or even ever noticed
    the changing colors of the leaves?

    Have you ever watched a squirrel
    bound from limb to limb?
    Taken a visit to the seaside
    just for a little swim?

    Have you ever seen in nature
    that what you want to emulate most?
    Isn't it wise to appreciate it
    before there's nothing but a ghost?




    Submitted on 2006-02-21 16:23:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      JESS! oh my god i love this! i've tried so many times to write poems like this but i've crashed and burned...miserably.this is so good and love it. its so nice to read a HAPPY poem once in a while aside from all the depression. well i cant find any imperfections.

    *kisses*
    -jen
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty.
    I've tried to write something like this before, but it didn't quite turn out as I had hoped. I think it was because I tried to make it too complicated.
    That is part of the charm of this write, I think. It's simple, as are the pictures it portray.
    Thanks for sharing it.
    ^.^

    ~Birdie~
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]
      Nature is beautiful, and so many people do not "appreciate it". I thought this poem was nice. The rhyme added to it, because all the rhyming seemed to flow and none of it was forced. I have had many camping experiences and I know that nature... watching a squirrel jump from tree to tree, or standing in a river, can be amazing and peaceful. Industrialization destroys. Good work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmm, nature. I tend to hiss at it now-a-days...what with the evil sun and all.

    So peaceful...yet so very deep. We tend not to appreciate the things that are right in front of us, because they have always been there...yet when it is gone, we notice, and miss it. Funny, when they trees are living we pay it no mind, but once it dies we think of it as losing a friend.

    When you sit back and listen to one of your friends, try to picture them not being there, what runs through your mind? Helplessness? Fear? Saddness? Hopelessness? Also picture them happy, as happy as they have ever been, happier then you've been. Are you happy for them? Are you jealous? Depressed? Then, when you bring yourself back to reality, see their face, hear their voice, you remember why you became friends in the first place. You remember why you have put up with their ups and downs. You remember why you love them.

    I wish everyone would just stop for a second, look around themselves, and see the good in their lives, just once, rather then the bad.

    Thank you. I know I threw some of my thoughts at you...but I'm sure you can relate to some(if not most) of my ramblings.

    I don't know what else to say...I enjoyed this...beautiful images...sorry for rambling

    Your Sista Bon
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      ah, the beauty of nature which can be so healing.
    makes me want to go to the mountains and sit by a stream and just breathe in the wonder around me.
    you're ending is poignant, for i fear we are destroying the beauaty of the earth.. for all the building that is going on around here, there soon won't be any trees around...

    i think i'll go outside now and just look and listen!

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      HAHA awesome jess. Love it muchly and stuff... and you wanna know something, I've done a lot of those things. In fact that is how I came by 12th Street... well kinda... not entierly. anyway... yeah, Awesome write, very descriptive, got my imagination running and the such. So yeah, again awesome write. Just like Always Jess, THNX

    - Kyle
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooh, really nice. This is pretty calm but also seems to be just a little bit sad *sniffle* But it seems to not be like your other writings, good job! Not that I don't like your other writing (lol) it's just that's it's cool that Jess's writing can change a bit.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      welll nice work.. i love it .. it put many images on my head .. and i just had to keep reading ... by the way i seemed to be a longer writing i wish i t could be longer. but well.. overall i think this is a god write .. good wording ..!
    keep on writing ! and why dont you check out my stuff??
    well
    ytake care!
    and peace and love!
    Victor!
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that's a wonderful poem about nature. The message it seems to convey is that you/or I, as the reader, need to slow down with life and enjoy the nature; what God has created for us. Vitoko is right, if the peom was a bit longer, then it would be far more interesting.
    I've noticed, though, that the whole poem was written in question form. It makes the reader think about the question, because you never answer it. (Of course you can't because you're asking about if the reader has done it.) Maybe, if you revised, to make it talk about nature instead of ask questions about it. It would need to be more elaborate on detail, but could be so much better.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Ebony Medvick | [ Reply to This ]
      Your meter and rhythm were fluid and even all the way through this. (except for the first couplet in the last stanza...try condensing by one syllable in the second line). Although I'm not a great fan of the rhetorical, this was varied enough that it served as a reminder to take time to smell the flowers.
    jan
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      *Applauds*

    Wow, hun. I think this is one of your best writes.
    The imagery in this write is so wonderful. And it's so relatable.

    Keep up the good work. I think the boy stuck a new writing nerve. Lol.

    Love ya.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes this is a unique poem. i love the repetition involved in it. Everything is well organized and neat. I love the way you made the poem. It makes me want to appreciate alot of things. So i think you got your point across. great poem and keep up the good job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Freaky DA | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed it, and thought you brought some good imagery. Nature is one of my passions, and I'm glad that you appreciate it as well. Good job!

    Candale-Switch
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Candale-Switch | [ Reply to This ]
      wz Delta s

    d.p. CP November Echo Sierra Oscar TL: low

    this comment must not show any encouragement, all superiors must clear accolades, so instead all words of kindness will be substituted, to be fair the same will be true if something I donít like or needs work, welcome to the new ES order.

    low security detail word substitution:: great= Bloomberg, nice= grain, I like= jackal, needs work= hammer, I donít like= floobergan, correction=correction {superiors like correction it is deemed ok}, but ďokĒ must be ď mopĒ warm= skip, you like= mango, think= oops, deep=trench, improved= plow

    st1: the question does drive me to oops, of course only on the mop of the superiors. I jackal the two last lines that makes me feel skip, it does feel grain of course only when it is mop to be that way.

    st2: the questions hammer, I think perhaps more scenery would be grain but only if you think it is mop, if you mango that is Bloomberg. the latter question does make me oops again haha hope that is mop to do that. But it isnít very trench I think perhaps some more scenery but that is all up to you. the questions are mop.

    st3: again here I think it hammer perhaps go into detail on these questions.

    st4: the squirrel part is mop at least I have a jumping squirrel in my mind, I donít not know if squirrels are mop I will have to get back to you on that. the beach is grain, jackal the ocean myself; can never get enough of those pounding waves. I think the scenery for the questions have plow, ya that is grain.

    st5: I think the first question is Bloomberg! uh oh I got excited on that, I am not suppose to show emotion here, I think I will be punished. the last two lines are also Bloomberg but that time I have successfully have not jumped, whew I coulda got us both in trouble for that.

    overall I say in encrypted Morse Code Smileys: _ __ _ __ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _


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    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey there ...
    this is pretty cool and a poem everyone should read ...
    i loved the flow and the rhythm of the poem ... the questions you asked in each one ...
    the ending was just right, how you told everyone in a real subtle way that they should be sure to appreciate nature before it disappears .... mostly because we're destroying it but yes ... hehe

    "Have you ever gone outside
    to simply feel the breeze?
    Or even ever noticed
    the changing colors of the leaves?"

    i would have to say thats my favorite stanza ... it was hard to pick but i guess i picked it because i love the feeling of a slight breeze hehe ... and the changing of the colors of the leaves ... a cool concept ...
    this poem really shows the amazing things in the creation of the world .. the little details that make all the difference ...
    so jst wanted to say, very cool poem, great theme, and very well presented ...
    congrats on this great write ...
    cheers, take care,
    DeepsLighter
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by DeepsLighter | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice questions to ask of all.

    Nice images that change from verse to verse, the rhyme was a teensy bit forced, (specially the last line) but it was nice enough to get away with.

    well done!

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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