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    dots Submission Name: Hugs From Heavendots

    Author: psycotic cowboy
    ASL Info:    18/m/confederate states
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 47/48/16
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       Dedicated to a deceased friend's family.

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    dotsHugs From Heavendots

    When you feel a gentle breeze
    Caress you when you sigh
    It's a hug sent from heaven
    From a loved one way up high

    If a soft and tender raindrop
    Lands upon your nose
    They've added a small kiss
    As fragile as a rose

    If a song you hear fills you
    With a feeling of sweet love
    It's a hug sent from heaven
    From someone up above

    If you awaken in the morning
    To a bluebird's chirping song
    It's music sent from heaven
    To cheer you all day long

    If tiny little snowflakes
    Land upon your face
    It's a hug sent from heaven
    Trimmed with angel lace

    So keep the joy in your heart
    If your lonely my dear friend
    Hugs that are sent from heaven
    A broken heart will mend

    Submitted on 2006-02-21 16:54:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a beautiful poem i can really relate. i've had relative pass away to and you reminded me that as long as we remember that there still watching over us the never really go away
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Null | [ Reply to This ]
      You rock, if I can steal that from the "bad comment" section. But you do. The flow rocks, the words, the meaning, the emotion, the stanza's, the entire thing, from beginning to end. And it hits so much in my own life. Comforating words I wished I had years ago.

    You're an amazing writer. Another fav. May I stalk you? LOL. I love that, that you can stalk people :) Anyway... Added you to my favs again! thank you
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, but I honestly think that your rhyming technique is holding you back. I think that your poetry could be even better if you broke out of your ABAB rhyme scheme and did free verse or even tried a different AB pattern of some sort. Try something new, just for a feel. I'm not telling you what to do, just an idea. But this poem did have an elegant feel to it, with the simplistic words you used. It was sweet and caring, so much unlike most of the poetry on this site, or any site for that matter. Nice job:)
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem! It's so pretty!:) I hope you keep writeing poems like this or similar to it, because you have a gift. You touched my heart when I read this. It's going into my fav. list. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by __symphony__ | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a great poem. It made me feel really happy! It also touched my heart. Good job, it had a nice flow. Nice title and I like what you wrote about!
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is my favorite one of yours yet! Rhyme scheme was pretty good too... the site says I'm supposed to critique on this site, but gosh, what's there to critique? Good style ;)
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]

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