You rock, if I can steal that from the "bad comment" section. But you do. The flow rocks, the words, the meaning, the emotion, the stanza's, the entire thing, from beginning to end. And it hits so much in my own life. Comforating words I wished I had years ago.
You're an amazing writer. Another fav. May I stalk you? LOL. I love that, that you can stalk people :) Anyway... Added you to my favs again! thank you
I like this, but I honestly think that your rhyming technique is holding you back. I think that your poetry could be even better if you broke out of your ABAB rhyme scheme and did free verse or even tried a different AB pattern of some sort. Try something new, just for a feel. I'm not telling you what to do, just an idea. But this poem did have an elegant feel to it, with the simplistic words you used. It was sweet and caring, so much unlike most of the poetry on this site, or any site for that matter. Nice job:)
I like this poem! It's so pretty!:) I hope you keep writeing poems like this or similar to it, because you have a gift. You touched my heart when I read this. It's going into my fav. list. Keep up the good work!