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    dots Submission Name: Princessdots
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    Author: E.S. McLaughlin
    ASL Info:    16/f/North Carolina
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 9/14/5
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 942
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       Written For AnointedPoetess as well as any woman who's ever felt that she's worthless and/or has been abused YOU ARE A PRINCESS IN GOD'S EYES


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    dotsPrincessdots
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    Broken
    Battered
    Worthless
    Shattered
    Thats what she was when she came to Me
    My love
    My Care
    Im always there.
    I told her the truth, you see
    But she did not
    And ran away
    Because in my love
    She could not stay
    She has suffered
    Beyond compare
    Not knowing that I
    Was forever there.
    Was I there when they hurt her?
    You can be sure
    I cried for every tear she did endure
    She is a Princess
    A jewel in My crown
    Even when she doesnt know Im around
    I told her that
    and she said No. Im no princess...Im not worth that, you know.
    Gently I told her Yes you are. You are more than a princess... you are a star.
    I saw it happen
    When she was abused
    The loss of pure innocence that became fused
    With the anger and pain all trapped inside
    I watched her hurt each day and I cried
    If only shed turn to Me., I wept
    I still sent the angels to watch while she slept
    She is My princess, The one I adore
    The one I sent down my Son to die for
    A Princess to rule in my Kingdom above
    My faithful daughter
    The one that I love
    She is now
    And forever will be
    My beautiful Princess
    A reflection of Me




    Submitted on 2006-02-21 17:20:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i loved it..its cool how you made God the narrator..i liked the beginning and the middle..because i could relate to that..the flow was great it was really easy and nice to read..loved it..keep up the great work!

    -Lucy-
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      Better than that i couldn't do, I agree with the fact that God really adores this woman, and I think its great that you wrote it to the gal above, adios.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Ant | [ Reply to This ]
      Momma, that was outstanding! I loved it sooooooooo much! There was def an emotional pull i felt while reading it, It was as if Daddy God was speaking directly to me! Thanks so much for dedicating this to me! I Love ya even when you get on me! Haha
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by AnointedPoetess | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very touching and beautiful the only line I had trouble following was in the line (I told her the truth,you see
    but she did not
    And ran away, its like you left out something or got ahead of yourself there,but other then that I thought this to be a very good write
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved how you brought the relationship with God so close and personal in this. Unfortunately it's sometimes hard to see His hand when everything is so dark. This is a beautiful dedication, and very much like a song I wrote earlier...even if yours is more explicit in it's meaning.
    jan
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat way of having God actually being the narrator.

    I must say I enjoyed the second half better, the staccato style of the first half makes the read a bit jumpy and stilted, I'd change that.

    Very well done, very enjoyable

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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