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    dots Submission Name: Endless Bar Nightsdots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    19/m/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 111/84/44
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I'm a bartender on the weekends figure out the rest on your own lol...


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    dotsEndless Bar Nightsdots
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    An alcoholic slumber,
    Void and numb of emotion,
    Careless without a bit of awareness,
    That everyone can see the erosion,

    Another night comes and he’s still drowning,
    Exhausted of waiting for his life preserve,
    And on the outside he is laughing and smiling,
    But within the barriers losing his nerve,

    And fighting has become all to common,
    But he sees his reflection with every swing,
    And while he knows every night has an ending,
    He prays that they will not begin,

    He picks up another bottle,
    Only increasing the suffocation,
    It only gets harder to swallow,
    For he will never escape his damnation.




    Submitted on 2006-02-21 18:34:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel ya, i feel ya...only i'm usually not the bartender watching from afar lol. i liked this.

    Careless without a bit of awareness,
    That everyone can see the erosion

    it's like hiding behind an empty glass bottle...people can see right through it. I like what you've said there.

    this reminds me a bit of one of my own posts, Numb It Up...and actually i think yours and mine would work great together...yours from the outside looking in, and mine from the whole hiding behind the glass bottle point of view.

    anyway, nice job...i'll be sure to look at some more of your writings
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      I grew up in a small town and with a drinking family and I'm guilty, at times, of drinking too many brews and I'm sure as a bartender you see some of the same people who that's all they have or they frequent the bars looking for something in a bottle and bar flys that most are not likely to find. I enjoy going dancing once in a while but I find that as I've grown older the mystique of those endless bar nights gets old fast!
    I liked how you gave us your 'birds-eye bartenders view' of the scene and the presentation of this piece!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually find this very ironic. You a bartender is writing about the horrors of alcoholism, then again I could be wrong. Anyways I like this piece. I cannot relate personally because… well I have never been to a bar (or drank for that matter… what on earth is wrong with me) but you really passed the image to me very well. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by SonAsylum | [ Reply to This ]
      my dad used to be an alcoholic...so i've wittnessed the effects of it first hand. and it can be a very dangerous and serious problem. ...being a bartender you might wittness this a lot more than others. and its kinda sad. but there are ways people can get help for themselves...my dad got himself in AA and has been sober for years now. i'm very proud of him. but i liked this poem...i like the problem it addressed. simply because i can relate to it...but this is a good write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]



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