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    dots Submission Name: on fire (verse one)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotson fire (verse one)dots
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    feeling the thunder
    on fire, bitch you got the weakness for slumber
    block the murderous ways, and let your pain fall out
    bitchass, on-lookers couldn't tell you what I"m about
    I rock two instead of one, but thats what I do
    most people won't accept it, don't gotta tell me man, I already knew
    the doc is it hot like the block, set fire to your corpse
    Can't tell me I don't know, I"ve already buried you and yours
    like hood, I set fire to nuclear cores
    it blows up with a bang and bitch, you soiled your droorers
    on fire with the gun
    ABERRANT, I"m the one
    Can't take shit from you,
    kill you and your crew
    your fagget ass can't cope
    because your sniffing the rope
    shit singe your nose hairs
    leave dead falling down the stairs

    I"m on fire when I kick this shit
    I"m on fire and your bleeding when I rip this shit
    man I know the president wanna flip this shit
    I'm on fire and its gone because you bit my shit




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      this soo reminds me off something my boyfriend would rap. You should make a cd and sell it. (but give me a free copy because i gave you the idea lol.) Anger and rap mixed makes the sweetest sounds and is poetry in my eyes lol. damnit i sound weird lol. but it was good 4 real 4 real.

    ~~DePoetry aka Danni~~
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh. this one was alright. it would sound better on track though. angry flows sound better but they usually don't read that well. it feels like u put a lot of emotion into this one, but not enough thought. i kinda like the angry u though. it gives u like a mic-ripping passion that the haters can't take away from u
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Um... I love flows. It just seemed to go around in a circle though. Nice imagery. I'd love to hit a cipher with you sometime.
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]


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