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    dots Submission Name: Mirror Of Perfectiondots
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    Author: darkwinged
    ASL Info:    17/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 184/217/74
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMirror Of Perfectiondots
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    I look into the Mirror Of Perfection.
    But I don't see my face.
    Instead
    I see my flaws.

    Crying,
    I grab the hammer I keep under my bed
    And break it.

    It shatters into four thousand pieces.
    This I know
    Because I took every one of those pieces
    And hid it somewhere.

    But every morning when I wake up,
    The mirror is back together again,
    For me to smash
    And to shatter into four thousand pieces.

    Only when I am perfect
    Will I see my face in it.
    But I will never be perfect.

    I cut myself with a mirror piece
    The one like a heart
    With a tear in it.
    The blood falling onto the mirror
    And drowing my sorrows.

    This mirror...

    It's been known to ruin lives
    To drive the greatest to insanity
    And to kill the innocent.

    This mirror is the Mirror Of Death




    Submitted on 2006-02-22 12:20:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beware the mirror, he that lookest thus... nicely and very niftily done poem here... potent and heady stuff... bravo... bravo... bravo ....
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      great write. it was really well written. and interesting...i'm a little confused though.tell me if i'm correct the mirror of perfect is the mirror of death..thats the idea i got from the poem, so i guess its right..it was a unique piece really good flow..liked it..keep up the good work!
    -Lucy-
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice piece with lots of originality through similies. Your simple language is also very effective here as it is easy for one to drift of and begin to write nonsense! very good once again.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by vinny2256 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! i really liked your peice. it had my total concentration right from the start. i actually want more. like where would you hide four thousand peices of reflection of yourself? see u got me thinkin. dont worry though im not a biter. just wanted to let you know i liked your poem. U.R.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by unclerob | [ Reply to This ]
      well...it was good i would say ..it has some good words ...and bad ones for me so i think you should improve it .. and well your metaphores are very good then ..
    take care and pace and love!
    thanks for sharing ..o
    and if you have time please take a look to my writings ..
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel the way you feel in this peice...the wording could have been more organized and maybe rhyme??? just a preferesnce...but i like this its how i feel evyday when i look into a mirror...and all the time before now...has been the same way...i feel the pain hun keep writing

    <3alwayz
    martini
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by MartiniMadeLvr | [ Reply to This ]


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