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    dots Submission Name: Before the Enddots

    Author: thor_s avatar
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 237/233/70
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsBefore the Enddots

    The music crashes loudest
    Just before it's end
    And the tree that grows the tallest
    Is blown over by the wind

    Sunset has more colors
    Moments before the night
    And the fruits number the greatest
    Right before they're ripe

    And in the autumn twilight
    Or under waning moon
    remember, who's eyes are brightest
    Are those taken too soon

    So raise your glass and toast to death
    As amber are the skies
    For a candle's flame burns brightest
    Just before it dies

    Submitted on 2006-02-22 16:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was a great poem! It gave me shivers and ..wow, it was just awesome. Brilliant imagery. I liked your wording and all of your stanzas. It was a short "raise your glass" to death poem. Great job! Its going on my favs!
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it! It brought to mind that even though something is huge, it can still be tackled and accomplished. I liked all the imagery :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a good write. I enjoyed the imagery and I loved the statement about going out with a bang. It was very vivid and exciting, and the rhythm worked nicely.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, the way you started out I thought you were gonna talk about some teenager who listens to loud music all up in their bedroom all by their solitary self like me, lol. This was great. Very beautiful imagery. Perfect wording, it was triple "S.", lol short, simple, and oh-so-very sweet. Good job and well done.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This write really made me think
    You questioned reality a lot with this write
    My favorite line was a candles flame burns brightest just before it dies
    That line write there really hit me
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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