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    dots Submission Name: Maybedots
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    Author: nicklacymatthew
    ASL Info:    31/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 105/97/37
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 805
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1338



    Description:
       I wrote this when me and my fiance' first started going out. So it's a few years old now. Again, not my best peice, but i'm in the frame of mind on reliving past memories, of ex's, of my future. I guess getting married will do that to a person. Reflections. Hey.. perhaps I need to write a poem titled that.. Hummmm... possible..


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    dotsMaybedots
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    Do I love you with all that I have,
    Or use you for all that I miss?
    Do I need you with me, completely,
    And if so, why am I questioning this?

    I wonder if this is really love,
    Or maybe just a fantasy?
    Is it just you that I crave,
    Or the the thought of you with me?

    Is this really love that I feel,
    Or something deeper within my heart?
    Am I asking for more then you can give,
    And setting myself up to be ripped apart?

    Maybe I'm digging too deep,
    Maybe I'm feeling to much.
    Maybe I miss more of you,
    Then just you're loving touch.

    Maybe I miss the way your eyes,
    Seem to caress my soul.
    Or maybe when you hold me,
    It's like you don't want to let go.

    Maybe it's the tone of your voice,
    When you say how much you care.
    Or am I hearing more,
    Than what is really there?

    Maybe it's the way you touch me,
    Or how you cried that night.
    Maybe it's just how I feel,
    That makes me wonder if this is right.

    Maybe it's the way,
    The tears soak my pillow.
    That makes me wonder,
    If maybe I should let you go.




    Submitted on 2006-02-22 16:51:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...I'm so sorry...I've not been engaged(yet?!) but I've had these sort of feelings...i maybe young but in my short little life, ive been through more [censored] than people twice my age could probally handle...But that's not the point, this is great, and i'll be checking out more of your stuff...kisses~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I like this a lot. It's a very difficult thing to sort out, isn't it? Been there! Really hits home, actually. Wish I would of thought of it as a topic.

    Very simple, and plainly spoken. I think you need to read and write stuff like this on a regular basis to keep everything stable.

    I very much like it, good job!

    -Toby
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by afterglow | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written poem depicting the confused state of mind .Your poem is asking lots of questions regarding falling in love.The poem is nicely structured.The title of poem is very appropriate.Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written poem depicting the confused state of mind .Your poem is asking lots of questions regarding falling in love.The poem is nicely structured.The title of poem is very appropriate.Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Well done, nice ryhming it had a nice flow throughout the poem. But what I liked the most was the whole unsure of it all, the maybe. It's hard these days to know whether you really love or if it just the thought of love that you love lol... But I really liked this read I'm glad I read it I happen to have a soft spot for love poems... Anthony
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Kersofmia | [ Reply to This ]


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