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    dots Submission Name: crazy sindots
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    Author: century
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 3/6/4
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 963
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 365



    Description:
       we try to be something we're not maybe we can try to pay more attoin to who we really are.


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    dotscrazy sindots
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    what world do we live in?
    how do we speak?
    this crazy sin
    is more than meek

    can you tell when it's dark?
    or when stars become holes?
    more viloence they say
    more blood,more poles

    is love all thats good
    is dark clothes a trend
    can you ever say never
    to this crazy sin?




    Submitted on 2006-02-22 19:06:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      umm as confusing as my-Don't save me...No seriously, its good, oh by the way, you commented on- that? i couldn't understand it apart from check out a poem i wrote...crazy sin...
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      good but i think you could have gone farther then what you did
    other then that great write keep up the good work i also think that this site should let me post it this but i wont because its gay
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by s33d | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good ...although short u can extract the core meaning of it. I love the use of rhetorical questions it adds to the mood of the poem... great job!
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by jreklaw | [ Reply to This ]


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