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    dots Submission Name: Blueberry Patchdots
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    Author: MurphyGirl44
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70/76/25
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Nature
    Total Views: 190
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       One of my favorite places...


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    dotsBlueberry Patchdots
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    Deep into the Shawungunk Mountains there is a long winding trail that descends into a mystical clearing. The trail is overgrown with blueberry bushes, and a tangy, sweet scent mixed with the crisp smell of pine lingers in the air. In the clearing the sun beats down upon a large, flat, stone surface, and further ahead a stream flows quickly, creating a liquid staircase. The water runs under a rickety old bridge, the wooden planks already somewhat rotten. A canopy of all different shades of green and brown lay behind the waterfall. Birds sing cheerful little melodies, but they are never spotted. Except for the hawks that soar high above the trees, in the open skyway, which is a magnificent blue, a blue that can only be captured in the eyes of an innocent child. Tiny chipmunks scramble through the dead leaves and pine needles, while deer wander quietly through the tall grass, leaving behind a trail of hoof marks. A soft breeze whispers in your ear, the water sparkles begging you to taste it, and the warmth you feel against your skin is like a mother’s embrace. Time does not exist in this place, only beauty and pure thoughts reside here.




    Submitted on 2006-02-22 23:28:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey there Kel, yeah been there quite some time ago...sounds still as pure now as then. There is a place about four hours from here I love similar...Lurray, Va. area...actually the George Washington National Forrest...was nice reading this indeed.
    This work just paints a very vivid mental image to me, I could see gettting lost there too quite easily.
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      you managed to paint a beautiful and serene picture,
    and i felt myself in the midst of this mystical and
    magical place.. i could see how it could become a
    favorite place, somewhere beyond the hustle and
    bustle of the world..

    thanks for taking me there!

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it marvellous to have a place like that?

    There is nothing quite as achingly beautiful as a quiet and simple piece of nature. You definitely did justice in describing it. And you're right about time barely seeming to exist.

    It seems so far away, and yet so close.

    Thank you for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Lulu La Feyne | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads more like poetry than prose. You've doen a good job giving the reader a clear picture of this place, but I would like to see a little of what it means to you; that would make it more personal.

    One minor thing: 'Except for the hawks that soar high above the trees, in the open skyway, which is a magnificent blue, a blue that can only be captured in the eyes of an innocent child' is an incomplete sentence.

    Nice work here.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]



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