Description: I think this piece pretty much speaks for himself. This represents a time in my life in which I really knew nothing about myself, not even how I felt or why I felt it. It's a dark, bone-chilling way to live.
Yeah you're right that period of life where you know nothing about life... When you get overpowered by bemusement... yeah it's disgusting and terrifying at times but one gets over it and has to move forwards... I remember when I was your age and... dunno... it makes me feel sick every time I muse upon the subject... was such an awful time... but here I am you know ... dunno really what else to say ...
As for the poem... I think itís certainly not your best one ... it didnít move me and it's also leaves something to be desired. Nothingness, doesn't say much... we know the feeling but it's just what it is... I consider, this poem has a lot of potential but you should concentrate a little more on descriptiveness so as to make it more personal and therefore have a stronger impact on the reader.
I almost didn't read it because I thought the title was in place of a better one that you couldn't think of. I am very, very glad I didn't listen to myself. The title is perfect. So is this piece. It describes exactly what you were feeling...nothing. Looking for a reason, looking for yourself, but left emptyhanded. I love the part:
The pen in his hand has bled to death. His soul has breathed it's destiny breath.
I agree with Adam that perhaps he felt he had done whatever it was he was here to do, and didn't know what came next. The line before it is an awesome metaphor for (forgive me if I am wrong) saying he could write no more. Maybe writing was his purpose, but now his proverbial pen has run dry, a metaphorical "death" to the life he was living. Or maybe he was writing about his "nothingness" (with pieces like this) and could find no more words. Whatever the case, you expressed it beautifully. This piece is short, but it says all you need to say. Poems don't always need to be long. Great job.
i think that is a brilliant line and my favourite in the poem. to me it means his destiny, the reason he is alive, has passed. it didn't pass in glory but in a breath, something so ordenairy and probably barely noticed. hence the nothingness of the present.
the ending was the weakest part in my view, not because of the words but because of the way it was structured. i'd suggest changing it to
There is where the void resides. Nothing.
the repition seemed a bit redundent to me and the "..." (forgotten what it's called) take away from the impact of the line. but it's your poem so it's completely up to you.