What Is Happening To Me
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What Is Happening To Me
What is happening to me How could this happen How can this be I'm ripped, torn, Bent out of shape I don't look the same I don't feel the same I am not the same What has happened to me Why can't I act normally I'm not in love, I'm just depressed Depression is leading my fate No one can hear my gentle cries at night nor in the morn Neither dawn nor dusk Oh, why am I so torn How can this be How could this happen What is happening to me |
Submitted on 2006-02-23 09:23:35 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| truthfully I read this more as a song than a poetry writing, but thats because it has A lot of repetition in it ; "what is happening to me" "what could it be" this is sort of the total focus of the piece, overall, and truthfully, it is simplistic, and I know most of the time I am advocating simplism but in this case *especially* when you have repetition in a poem, you should have varied word structures and words for that matter Use word thesaurus or and online one Keep Writing, and come check out my page I just got back into it Thanks, Bill- | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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