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Vous pouvoir m'aide me rappell


Author: Marcy
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Vous pouvoir m'aide me rappell



Vous pouvoir m'aide me rappelle

It’s easier to be empty
To make a living off comic strips
And teenage girls
I’m trying to write this for you
Trying to catch you in-between actuality and indifference
Washington has forced us to a substandard
Another mid night meeting
Frozen sheets and slick park benches

The problem with bed is the back seat
The problem with the back seat is the people

They are distracted by each other’s words
It’s too confusing
Not knowing when to speak
Instead it is about music
About marijuana and sunsets

“Can you help me remember?’

Remember backwards baseball caps
And rock and roll at it’s finest
Dance with tear like sweat
Hair like a millionaire game of fifty-two card pick up

Watch them in the back seat
In the wal mart parking lot
They are the same
Copies of thousands
Pre sold all across America

Empty

No words between them
They are not ready
It is too much to touch
And feel and see each other
Too much to know that out there
People are waiting
Buying bread with food stamps
And stomping out campfires

In the morning they will forget
Before the sun rises
And the seats dry
They are not together now
Instead the rain is falling
And the words are losing influence

It's so much easier to be empty




Submitted on 2006-02-23 09:31:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  its a very soft kind of beautiful
but it is harder to be empty sometimes
just a little harder when there are no words
when it is pre sold and indifferent like you show

the way you put the words together
it makes it abrupt
even though it is soft
i like that
| Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Flamingo Leg | [ Reply to This ]
  I Really Really like this one
To me this write speaks of how those with less money can and mostly do live happier and healthier then those with millions
The Lower class has a bad stigma
But if you look carefully at the lower class they are the hardest workers and I believe out of the Lower middle and upper classes the class giving the most Love
Very Important and thought provoking write
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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