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    dots Submission Name: Stranger from the bedsheets.dots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 823
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       This is about being lonely and I want you to tell me what you get out of it.

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    dotsStranger from the bedsheets.dots

    there was a hole in her bed that she crawled inside
    sometimes she felt trapped
    but then she could find a way to leave that place
    and go back to were she started from
    her sheets were white
    and she blended with them
    her pillows were ripped thread by thread
    feathers flew everywhere
    one lightly landing on her hands
    she held it there
    gave it a name
    crawled in her hole again
    and let it keep her warm

    Submitted on 2006-02-23 13:08:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      im sorry
    i mistook the wording i thought about sex
    now knowing its for you having a child, it makes it more beautiful
    im not saying this to redeem myself
    one poet to another
    it is beautiful
    you did pretty well
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by 1949mercury | [ Reply to This ]
      makes me think of sex with a carefree type chik
    dont know sounds like a woman id marry her pillows ripped thread by thread
    like i said
    a whacky chik id fall in love with
    then leave
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by 1949mercury | [ Reply to This ]
      My crazy head! For some reason (maybe cause of all this talk of little people), I see you teeny tiny, crawling in and out of a hole in your little bed, with only a feather for warmth. I can't get past that to find a deeper meaning, cause my head is in a weird place right now. It's very pretty, though. I like the line about going back where she started from. Well, I guess that's all I got. I'm far too strange today.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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