“Death to the Poets” by Martin S. Allen

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Author:	Martin S. Allen
ASL Info:	33 male
Elite Ratio:	3.98 - 671/222/43
Words:	110

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Average Vote:	3.0000
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This is simply about censorship, but on a deeper level it is about opression.

“Death to the Poets” dots

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Death to the poets, to the words that they write
Death to the truth, to the works and their might
We burn the pages of information
Useless news and education
Throw the books upon the fire
See the flames grow higher and higher
Freedom is lost on the poverty stricken
There’s no need for knowledge it’s strictly forbidden
Pacing and toiling, there work is for naught
Beaten and bleeding for consciousness and thought
“To burn the classics and to bury the scholars”
The ashen sky is empty of color
Death to the poets, to the beauty and the grace
Death to the passion, till it’s lost without a trace

Submitted on 2006-02-23 13:27:53 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. This is quite a piece of work you have. I really enjoyed reading it.

As I'm sure you know, just recently (September 29–October 6, 2007 - to be exact) was Banned Book Week. It celebrated those books that were challenged and/or removed from libraries based on its "suggestive" content. You say that "if you destroy one, destroy them all." The world is already preventing us from reading, so why not learning as well?

A very strong message, and one that I agree with.

I do have a comment though. On line 8, you have a run-on sentence that could use a simple punctuation. In my eyes, there are two choices: a hyphen or a parentheses.

Rather than:

"There’s no need for knowledge it’s strictly forbidden"

Consider:

"There's no need for knowledge - it's strictly forbidden."

or:

"There's no need for knowledge (for it's strictly forbidden)."

(Please note the addition of the word in the second suggestion).

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This is a brilliant piece that brings up a very good point. After I read it, I thought of something that intrigued me: "If you had a problem with the book, didn't you read it in the first place? You could've put the book down, but you just kept reading." Something must've had them hooked to the book, no?

Have a good day,
Cirruculum (TK)

P.S.: I'll be reading some more of your works. Although I'm not near as talented as you are, maybe you could read a few of my works as well? I'd appreciate it.
| Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by Cirruculum | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, this is poem is just like the book Fahrenheit 451. I read about the first 65 pages and then lost interest. Anyways, I already knew most of what happened in the book. It is set in a future where books are viewed as evil and whenever they are found they are burned. These "firemen" create fires instead of putting them out.

This was an excellent poem on censorship and oppression. Your valiant writing has struck a chord with this poet. I cry "life to the poets!"

Keep up the good writing! I love it!
| Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
  i picked this one out because of the title, applause applause, this is a really great poem in my point of view, great rhyming and all.
(There’s no need for knowledge it’s strictly forbidden) this line remminds me of the days of the inquisition, some things don,t really change.
most enjoyable.
take care
gerry
| Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
  This is beautiful. I lit upon your site yesterday and decided to have a look at some of your writes .... Then I went straight to this one on account of the alluring title. (Today I felt compelled to come back to leave a little comment) When I read it I was just flabbergasted by its cynicism and neatness. It bring to mind the time I was studying war poetry which was one of the most exhilarating and exciting periods of my academic life. It also calls to mind some of the poems of my favourite writer “Siegfried Sassoon" with all its passion and powerful depictions.

In the same regards, I must say that your poem flows wonderfully. It’s certainly striking and mind - blowing. Everything you say is something I have also felt not only when it comes to literary censorship but can also be applied to other aspects of one's life.

Let me tell you that you are a great writer and that you obviously have something to say.

It's been a while since I have read a truly moving piece as this one that's why it's going straight to my fav’s not only because of its sheer greatness but owing to the honesty embedded in it.

With respect and admiration.

Ethan

| Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
  neat. my favorite lines were the last two. how your write talks about passion and what-not. but the only problem i have with this is in the 7th and 8th lines:
"Freedom is lost on the poverty stricken
There’s no need for knowledge it’s strictly forbidden".....
i didn't like how it said 'stricken' and then 'strictly'..i don't know, they just sound too much alike. maybe i'm just nit-picking..
but overall i really liked this. keep it up
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2007-07-14 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
  IM TRYING TO FIND SOMETHING BAD TO SAY BUT SHET..ANOTHER GOOD
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  exactly! this was fcckin good man. im not easily entertained or impressed but damn this should be published if it isnt already. a throwback to the totalitarian hitler days which, albeit in a different form still is alive today. the suppression of creativity and free thinking is an enemy of many, for example religious fanatics and the like feel that the inquisitive spirit is an abomination. fucc them! oh and alot of our youth today are pretty dull and trained like mommy and daddys little pets. they vote for the same people their parents do. they go to the same churches and are offended by the same things. lap dogs humorless little wastes! right(write) on man. keep stirring shht up!
....take care
frite
| Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
  so true many times poeple can't just say it like it is, well I guess thats our job to say what we mean and what needs to be said.

Much love
James
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
  The topic was clever. And the rhymes really flowed, it had a nice creative edge. Your lines were real and read with impact. I favor this format of poems, but i like to call them lyrics.

SINceerly
SIN

CHeck some of mine, they read kinda similiar, maybe not the same ideas but....o well.
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  i feel a world without poets isn't a world at all. i like how you wrote it.

draconus
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
  a poets mind others can't comprehend.. forever using words to express.. the thought of the passion the truth the pain the heartache the joy the happiness fading away is vivid here... if i could never write again it would be devestating.. freedom of speech is a great thing... each and everyone being able to express themselves in such a brillant way...

i think that all makes sense to me :)
| Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Justmenow14 | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with Graeme on the rhythm being a little choppy, this reads more like a speech the way it is written. Also in lines 2 and 9 the word 'there', I believe should be their.

Besides those two things, I think that this piece really speaks to a person. There is passion it it that only a poet knows, and I think that is what makes the piece.

All in all, a wonderfully powerful write.

Brightest Blessings,
Crystal
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
  Nicely done, I quite fancy this.

The rhythm is a bit choppy, this was meant to be read aloud, it's great that way. It has some good points, and some good lines too.

My only change would be the last line, for meter's sake, i'd change it to simply:

"Death to the passion, till lost without a trace"

a very interesting read,
well done

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Pacing and toiling, there work is for naught
Beaten and bleeding for consciousness and thought

These were creative lines. You really kept it hypocritical the whole way through.
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  I was reading about treason the other day & things are really scary with any type of censorship or intolerance - I believe that is why our world is in the state it has been in for many a year.
I was glad to see you post I like the title and the thoughts and I liked how you concisely presented "IT"
bravo!
love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
tif
| Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a fast-paced, beautiful poem, I don't really like the way the last line flows though. Do you like to read? If you're anything like me, you love it. I suggest you read Farenheit 451. A book that follows these lines perfectly.
The Conqueror
| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, A deeply cynical piece, I suppose it's meant to be, but I'm not completely convinced that it's as bad as this makes out.
It was easy to read and made its point without a hitch.
Nit picking spell check
'Pacing and toiling, THEIR work is for naught'
not much else to go on, very neatly done. I enjoyed it, thanks.

Later
Phil
| Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]

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