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    dots Submission Name: Almostdots
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    Author: thetwilight
    ASL Info:    23/F/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 81/68/15
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 756
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    Description:
       How we feel about how we look sometimes affects how we feel about our relationships.
    Inner beauty & inner strength when realized can help take away some of that vanity pain, as sometimes when we don't like what we see in the mirror, we don't like what we see behind the surface of the person in the mirror. If everyone were to leave me, and all the world should die... I'd have that fire inside & commune with the moon. It's about finding that primal inner strength & understanding it...

    It burns to find it.
    But the Pheonix must burn...
    To Emerge.


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    dotsAlmostdots
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    I could almost pass for pretty sometimes
    Yet Iíll never be considered beautiful.
    It's quite alright
    Iíve been
    Painting over the damages
    With my skin
    Since
    I have found no place
    That I must be inÖ

    I am in no hurry
    Now is my reality
    And I can
    Dream right through
    The sky.

    Iíve got an ugly mouth
    But
    The
    Moon
    Is
    Mine.

    I can see
    Everything
    So Iíve learned to
    Look away
    The truth will always be there
    If it is wanted for
    Someday

    Iíve got a nasty temper
    But
    The
    Passion
    Is
    Mine.

    I think Iíll be
    OK.

    Pack your things worn and tattered;
    Suffocate them in your plastic dress
    Bury them all in a cardboard coffin
    Leave behind this mess.

    Iíve got
    A
    Stubborn mind
    But
    The
    Twilight
    Is mine.

    I think Iíll be
    Ok.




    Submitted on 2006-02-23 16:48:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like some of ur other writings this has a very od structure that ties up quite nicely and unexpectantly. this was great. i really felt the sinking feeling of no self esteem. it really invited a low almost destructive feeling into my mind as i read it. this was great
    sun/justin
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Sun | [ Reply to This ]
      yo i like the structure too. its awsome
    the whole piece is nice
    makes u feel happy bout urself
    its coo like dat



    Queen Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good write, the structure of it rocked. Keep it up. You will grow from here I promise. Live life like there is no tomorrow.
    Loveage,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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