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    dots Submission Name: I said what I meantdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1046



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       please do not ask me what I said because I can't really tell you that ....however...this is what came out of it


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    dotsI said what I meantdots
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    so many troubles, in just one mind
    I wish to brake and set flame to the sands of time
    regrets cloud thoughts, created wishes of change
    but clocks don't move backwards, and so my thoughts then dirange
    continuing walking isn't easy when there's a chain around you neck,
    so I"ll just sit and remanesse about life, and I"ll reflect
    about the many disadvantages of being on the wrong path
    but not caring at the time, I'm moving slow but so fast
    wasn't a closing conclusion-unworthy of it's place
    but it took my soul and twisted it, and through it in my face
    god damn, I don't know what to do anymore
    so I"ll just sit and wait for nothingness, I'm sure that's whats instore
    lying has never been apart of me, but nobody believes
    my heart is deep inside, it hurts and it grieves
    I'm sorry little B, I guess I fucked up
    But what I said is what I meant, thats just between the two of us




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      i think this was actually one of the best things i've ever seen u write. it was really poetic something u don't often see from u. it was actually quite unexpected. u kept a flow! the whole thing was good from beginning to end. if i had to pick my favorite lines i'd have to put the whole damn thing!
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      just my oppinion but very repetitive and this petry i think dumbs down the nobel of writing of venting ones true feelings :) have a nice day
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Lewiskane | [ Reply to This ]
      sooo wat did u say? jk. Anyways whatever you said i get the point. You can't change what you said and what you said you ment. though some people say things they don't mean but can't change it. *sigh* in writing something so simple my thoughts moved to more complex and complicate thoughts. So in english. This was good.

    ~~DePoetry aka Danni~~
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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