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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 1166
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    Bytes: 759



    Description:
       Just some thoughts. Last line is from RH "Street Spirit".


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    Spend the last couple of months in a hell
    of depression that covered my eyes
    was searching for things that were my own
    looking for the reason why
    there is so much pain in the world
    why I cant doing anything to change it
    everyone around me is falling down
    the times is moving to fast for us now
    distraction and noise cloud the mind
    nothing is simple anymore
    but I know there is still love out there
    feeling like I dont belong here anymore
    like my home is of a different world
    for the time being Im here
    so what should we do with this time
    sit back and watch the world decay
    or use the only true gift God gave us
    immerse our self in love




    Submitted on 2006-02-24 00:01:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi, amazing, you are proof.

    "so what should we do with this time
    sit back and watch the world decay
    or use the only true gift God gave us
    immerse our self in love."

    tom
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was perfect the way it was Lynn. Description was first rate and your thoughts were very compelling. And yes, you are right about love...it is always there - always has been - and always will be.

    When all is gone, love will always remain.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a great piece but i think it would be better if you separated a little
    but all in all well done
    thanx for all your comments
    and keep posting

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      it would be good o punctuate. Maybe also cut down on the number of words pre line, i think you can adiquetly get your point across without saying so many words. I think this is the outlook of many teens: depressed with nothing going their way, attempt to be optimistic and you shall overcome.
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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