I can relate to this to much to have a negative critique...it was something that concerned you and that you felt was important so you wrote it down and I praise you for that, I personally don't like haikus but this was a great poem for the facts that I've already said. Best wishes and some randomly thrown in comforting thoughts, Jaz
Haikus are often not the most creative, so I kind of understand where caroon dude is comming from, but it DOES NOT sound like a commercial! However, a little more punctuation would help it to sound a bit better, maybe something to this effect?: A world plagued by fear. On the brink of destruction; Who can save us all? The message was displayed in a very good way, short and sweet with not alot of time for anyone to argue-I like the way you put it. The title also lets the reader know what he/she is getting into (if for some reson someone is against that sort of stuff, they he/she has a bit of heads up).
sounds entirely to cliché almost like the guy with the [censored]ed up voice that talks during movie previews thats exactly what it sounds like it just needs to end with "coming this march" so come on man try to be a little more creative
I never thought that so much could be put into so little and make sense. Yet you've done this here. So much meaning, so much emotion in just a few lines. This grasped me. And at least for me, the answer to that is the Lord. He's my Savior and Salvation. It's just a shame that the world hasn't found him for themselves.