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    dots Submission Name: The Mortgagedots
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    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something I penned real quick about buying our house. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsThe Mortgagedots
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    Please sign here, initial there.
    Sign here, initial, sign again.

    Alas, it seems there is no end.

    A vial of blood, a lock of hair.
    My name scribbled to nonsense.
    I didn't think I'd be this tense.

    Endorse a check, then sign once more.
    We're almost done.

    It's a damn good thing.
    As my eyes start to blur, and my ears start to ring.

    A roof and walls, and a new tile floor.
    A beautiful home for my family.
    A joy from the previous insanity.

    Classic green shutters and a fine red door.
    Thirty years to bitch and moan
    About what it took to get the loan.

    Thirty years to make memories
    A lifetime as we all grow old
    A lifetime since the "bought" and "sold"

    All done with love for my family
    I did it then, I would do it again.
    I did it, wouldn't you my friend?




    Submitted on 2006-02-24 10:49:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah i know about that sense of panic and relief when signing and endorsing and sighning once more... nothing like lookforward to building memories.. a diffrent theme from looking back on them...
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one, it is different than the usual type of poetry I like....but yet there's something about it that makes me like it so much. Great job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by luckyms20 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is a classic piece done in a very modern way. I think that it is something new that more people can relate to and I completly get this. I just moved and it really is all just a headache.

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    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      your so right a big committment but then when
    or in divorce that house will be your biggest headache and more signatures and initials
    well done
    very creative
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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