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    dots Submission Name: daisydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/BrokenHeart
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    dotsdaisydots
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    i hate him
    i love him
    i hate him
    i love him
    i hate him



    picking petals off a daisy




    Submitted on 2006-02-24 13:28:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm .....I remember the daisy test. I find it interesting that what has changed is perspective. Unless I totally had it wrong (which is highly possible, I do many things backwards) the saying many eons ago when I was young(er) and oblivious to the beauty I was destroying was 'He loves me, He loves me not.' And here you are proving the enlightenment of today's woman. Less concern with what 'he' wants, you are very rightly deciding what your own feelings are. We definitely need to know what we want before we can have a chance at getting it. The very hard lesson we all learn at some point in our lives is we usually don't really know what we want, or find out too late, and/or we don't always get what we want. But there's never anything wrong with either wanting or loving. Unfortunatley hating is a waste of self. The only thing we can control in this life is our repsonse to it.
    For a brief poem this sure provoked alot of thought and comment. Thanks for putting up with mine~chris
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, simple but pretty. Simplicity does that. It different and I'm different so I like you different :) It reminded me of a typical relationship that has it's up's and down's, and like most relationships you end up hating him until you pick the guy and the last petal is "I love him"

    X- Atonement

    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sad little piece - I feel so sad for you little daisy girl!

    Give life a chance - I know things are hard now but who knows? If you need to talk let me know.
    special smiles and love for you
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      When you pick that last petal
    Just say
    Im Free
    And then you can make up your own mind
    Very different write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with poetic princess.Find something to do that you enjoy(thats not dark unless its murder..in that case dont get caught^_^I know this idea though its I hate him>I hate him>I kill him in my sleep>I hate him.Basically Im over him and yeah it is hard and painful but eventually hate wins in these cases.Good luck.
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm He hates me/i hate him not/he hates me/i hate him not. okay i get it. You feel sad don't you? smile and hug somebody...and beat someone at pac man. That always makes me feel happy lol. But anyways this was...depressing. Good job lol.

    ~~DePoetry aka Danni~~
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      well dont you feel dark to day / all alone with your flowers and there is nothing you can't control / i love the bleak in this peice . it reminded me when i "Zing" for myself..

    other thenthat keep sleeping and drinking water ..

    janus
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      ...ok then...yeah well i guess it's kinda good? well idk its just almost to basic...i mean i get the idea but mabye end another poem with this part...

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]


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