I'm seeing a lot more of 'internet' language in poetry, and though it's not my style, it is a driving force in youth forms. You've used it well here.
I do have some advice: Check, double check and triple check your spelling and grammar (in the form presented). There is a great piece here, but alot of folks won't give it the time of day if they see any errors, especially with the IM speak.
there was alot of emotion in this.my dad has never had the chance to lie to me.and parents only lie i guess because they dont want to see us do something if we knew the truth.im not sure though.but anyway good write later
it had a lot of emotion..the beginning was my favorite part..and yea dads do lie but only because they "care" i guess..i wouldn't understand what parents do because i'm not in their shoes..but i liked this poem i could relate somewhat..and just a bit of advice don't abbreviate, sometimes it gets the reader confused..and don't type too fast when writing a poem because you can mess up on the spelling, when your done writing another poem just look it over and make sure everything's ok and right..don't take that the wrong way i loved the poem its just some little advice..loved it..laters..keep up the great work! :P -Lucy-