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    dots Submission Name: Homedots

    Author: Evil Jesture
    ASL Info:    22/m/wherever
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 165/201/93
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       A home story

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    I walk alone in this lonely town
    Looking for what has left me
    Looking for what might lead me home

    My home where the grass grows on the lawn
    Right in our front yard
    Not weeds sprouting everywhere
    No broken windows to be shared
    Where a place that youd feel safe
    A safe place away from your bad days....

    The town is extreamly still
    And dust roll off the hills
    Silence is seen throughout the land
    I am searching for a hand
    A hand to lead me home
    My daddys gone where is he coming from
    Does he still love me
    Daddy come back to me

    Where I am safe from pain
    Where I find a safe place to stay
    From the hauntings of the past
    Where I can stay dafely away from night
    And this fight will keep me alive

    I dont know where to go
    I am at a path where I must go right or left
    Each leads down a differnt path
    I see ghost at my heels
    And blood drips within my tears
    I need to find a way home
    Need to find a way out of here

    I want to go home
    A place where the grass grows
    And a safe haven from all that I fear
    And a place away from here

    I travel down a path
    Alone I walk and it will last
    Home I will not go again
    Because I travel alone on this path to be a man
    And alone right now I feel
    And tears I will not reveal
    Abandoned in this place
    But I will find my way out on my way
    Away from the safety of home

    Submitted on 2006-02-24 21:59:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was pretty good...I like some of your other ones better but not comparing it to any it was still good...this kinda reminded me of (I used to be obessessed with taking back sunday) this one line... "home is where you make it love don't get yourself confused" dunno that just kinda struck me while reading this one...I'll get around to reading all of urs...so lazy today lol...
    love and peace.
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, kind of a long way home from the top to the bottom and then when i read it and got to the last, you never made it home...was kinda confusing to me in someparts, but i confuse me sometimes. I think at the end of it you should change it to "Away from horrors of the Saftey Home." that would be some kick ass [censored] in my book. but anyway. i ramble late at night peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by John Ratliff | [ Reply to This ]

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