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    dots Submission Name: How Do I Get Bydots
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    Author: Chihuahuii
    ASL Info:    16/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 75/90/36
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 307
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 917



    Description:
       I started writing it because I was mad about having to pay over $10 just to get to and from high school each day. Then I trailed off into the cost of living.


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    dotsHow Do I Get Bydots
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    All I carry's bus fare,
    So how do I get by when
    Someone's selling issues on the street corner;
    When the whole world
    Needs a buck-fifty for pop,
    And people are dying
    'Cause they can't afford a couple highs or jinks.

    How do I get by when
    No one else can?
    'Cause I got about a million green
    For half a million brown
    That I can sell to you for twice the price,
    And see how you like it
    When you're shivering cold'n mad
    Because I got your money fair and square.

    But that's a lil' shaisty,
    'Cause I can have all my green
    For all your brown
    But I still gotta get home
    To my family,
    To heaven,
    To Life,
    And I'm a little screwed,
    'Cause somehow, somewhere,
    I think I lost my fare...




    Submitted on 2006-02-24 23:02:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this was indeed erratic. I think your chose of words, left me the reader confused. I think this poem is not quiet abstract, nor direct either. It was more along the lines of random thoughts. the flow was not continous. I think this had some nice thoughts to make one think over...but it left me feeling disconnected to this. Not bad.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i know what you mean... the world has gone so down hill... in the words of a well known band "...the bottom line is money and no one gves a [censored]!..." But there are some good people out there... though not that many...
    the poem seemed to coast in a general dirrection, but at times was a little erratic. I think that's god. THe reader shouldn't always know what's to come, and it gives the reader an idea how the writter is feeling as they wrote it... Keep it up!

    Loren
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]



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