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    dots Submission Name: I believe...dots
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    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1972



    Description:
       this is a prose which talks about the greatness that is God, and why we shud believe in him... always.


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    dotsI believe...dots
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    I am one of the great descendents of the very first couple of Adam and Eve. It is quite strange how God (his greatness) created them and hence we came...
    Till Today, I didn't believe in God, Why? well everyone tries to reason a way out, so used to I. I had never encountered a miracle or a fact that should tell me to belive in God... but I Believe in God, Today...
    We all in this society do what we are here to do; and What we presume is to accumulate the so Lustful Greens while infact our role is just contradictory to His plans. We try to accumulate wealth- not love; we try to speak mean nasties-not praises; we never forget other's bad conduct- never try to forgive and we become our own Gods to please our so "righteous" deeds...
    But I believe in God, Today.
    Having been living on this rock of Life, we came to know about God closely only at the times of distress and mocked in otherwise happier times. we always choose to keep our eyelids shut and when the "water" has reached the throat, we try to swim out of it, then believing in God; else not.
    But I believe in God, Today...
    We created the word "God" and found a third eye to reach God's holy ambiance to please Him and us...!?
    Whenever we do hard work, we tend to look towards God for strenth- He gives without askance; when we confide in Him- He opens the doors of Light.But when you praise Him Not and expect him to be ever merciful, What did you then learn while being carved?
    you say then, you don't believe in God and I say then, I believe in God,Today...
    From up there, He sees all of us when no one else watches our good deeds- He rewards...and help you umpteen number of times without being asked, and you say God isn't there?
    But I say, you fools, if you arn't feeling the way I do, I, then say, still God is great and I believe in Him and One day so will You...




    Submitted on 2006-02-25 02:55:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi! I'm a brand new member to Elite Skills, and am quite pleased that the first story I've read here is something inspirational and edifying. Overall, I enjoyed reading this work--In our world so depraved by sin, I am eternally grateful there are people like you, who genuinely care about God and try faithfully to live as He wants us to live. May God bless you!

    The negatives you expressed, such as how we never forget bad conduct nor try to forgive, those are true, but only generally speaking. I recommend that you avoid making sweeping statements about all people, because you might offend them. Using words as "generally", "overall", and "for the most part" are good to use, so you can direct comments at groups as wholes, instead of every person that makes up the groups. I hope I'm making sense, but if I'm not, please let me know.

    A few other little things I noticed: "strength" is misspelled. I also almost thought "askance" isn't a real word, until I looked it up. It's a unique word I've never seen until now.

    Again, I enjoyed reading this. I feel pretty confident that it'll inspire the open-minded non-Christians and non-devout Christians to think about God and possibly redefine their views of Him. I look forward to reading more of your writings soon! Take care, and God bless!

    ~Anthony
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Tony327 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you could have done a more descriptive job. This was to simple... everyone knows there's a God, whether they profess it or not. Atheists no there is a God, they just deny it. This is what ran through my mind as I read it.
    So, he believes that there is a God. Does he believe that He is your personal Saviour? Does he believe that you- if he's even a Christian- is saved by the grace of God and not by his works that he's done? Does he believe that God sent His one and only Son, Jesus Christ, to die on the cross for His elect?
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]


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