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    dots Submission Name: My Historydots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 801
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    dotsMy Historydots
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    Come and venture with me,
    In a journey of my history,
    No lies, no covering of facts,
    Just the truth 4 u 2 c,
    When there was no slavery,
    When lands belonged 2 their propper owners,
    No roberies,
    When people would cross borders with no boundaries,
    Lets do an inquiry,
    Of the past events,
    But lets keep the facts clean,
    Not covered by hidden tents.
    Lets expose the truth once again,
    When Natives used 2 roam their lands,
    When hispanics, latinos, and chicanos were all "Mexicans".
    B4 we were distant brothers,
    B4 we started the conflict with one another,
    And racism was an event in life,
    That remained covered.
    I'm just trying to past this lil' knowledge in me,
    A little thing I call My history.
    (Our History Now)




    Submitted on 2004-05-02 10:51:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      -No lies no covering of facts- try putting a comma between frases that should be separated.
    | Posted on 2004-05-02 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]
      well i loved the way you made it flow, interesting piece. WHo knew history could be so enertaining!? He... Well that's most of what I can say. USe teh whole words instead of 2, 4 or thyat sorta thing. Gives it caché.
    | Posted on 2004-05-02 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]


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