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What You dont See

Author: diamonds_2_dust
ASL Info:    15/m/Eugene Oregon
Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 105 /161 /35
Words: 152
Class/Type: Poetry /
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i am aware this sounds bad.... i should fix it huh?....

Blood Lust is about ho my aunt and uncle only took me in becuase they could collect the money benefits of taking care of me (my dead father's social security money!!!) and i found out and... well, they put me in a mental home...

What you dont see is about how my aunt and uncle had only daughters. Four of them to be exact. And my aunt thought i would be the same way as them... no i dont mean tampons, i mean... she would never listen. It's kind of like the song "i'm still here" off treasure planet (they never put it on a soundtrack). They refused to understand me...

What You dont See

What You dont See

You call me sillent
becuase you don't hear me
you call me defiant
all because i choose to be

something else
that you've never seen
not what you're used to
like pictures in the magazines

All my life, i've lived in this cage
and the world thinks that's just fine
this is the way they want me to age
but this life isn't mine!!!

Just let go and let me be free
I'm what you dont see
just let me out and let me be
I live the life that you don't see

Just becuase you don't understand
doen't mean it's not true
it's simple, i'm not a boy, i'm a man
and i'll never be anything like you!!!

You'll never get it,
you can never understand me
becuase you fail to comprehend
"I'm what you don't See!"

Submitted on 2006-02-25 13:10:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is quite the anger anthem.

You'll never get it,
you can never understand me
becuase you fail to comprehend
"I'm what you don't See!"

It is also very real and comes across with intensity in the reader's mind. Your message is clear.

I certainly see you in this poem.

Nice work

| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
  Hhhmmm, lots of anger and bitterness. Your poem was very intense and very edgy, blunt. I think the flow was off a tad and I think that you may want to revise this and decide if you want this to rhyme completely or not. Now this was filled with venom! I think you overshadowed this poem to much with your revenge and to little of why. I feel all tense now reading this. You did a good job with this one.

| Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  your out cry. is not unfamilur to my ears.
i wonder how old you are?
with your family if you are under 18 your stuck unless you become a word of the cort which can take a while.
do you dress punk or goth or how?
i dont quite know except in your writings.
keep your cool
consentrate on preparing your way when you leave so do well in school and find a job that you can use. try to trades you like to do. its sometimes the easy in. in the work field while you go to college for something else.
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]

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