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    dots Submission Name: Fairdots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 807
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       It is about losing my daughter being set up,
    and having people lie about me and not really haveing the chance to mother this child I gave birth to.There is alot more hurtfull things about it but it proble don't matter.She was although I will say taken from me at the hospletle before I could leave home, I had no reall chance to be a mom just give birth.

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    What is fair in life for crying out loud
    We all have strife,
    What is fair in life
    We people you love set you up to fail,
    And simile at the pleading you call,
    What is fair in life
    When you are a mother,
    Give birth, She is taken away at the hospetle,
    Before you can even have the chance,
    To hold her, and raise her,
    What is fair in life when no one gives you a
    chance and sooner or latter
    You find no truth to your marriage,
    What is fair in life when you are abanded,
    Left stranded,
    With so much fear,
    You can't shed any tears?
    What is fair in life?

    Submitted on 2006-02-25 14:56:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks anyways sorry you dont like it but I know other writers that do. -totojane03-

    Vile Deception was complaining of your spelling, too,k on 2/25/2006. You keep saying, when you get around to it.... why not fix at least ONE and have it look right? It's not "purrr-fect" we're going for, it's an illusion of "educated" and not "stupid as a rock & doesn't give a [censored]".

    Guess I'm not the only one.

    Please, for the love of god, FIX your errors!
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by therealmojymo | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a very sad feeling poem, and you do understand that. However, some parts I just could not understand. The spelling was off in some places, which really detraacts from being able to lose yourself in the poem. Other than that, it was good.
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Vile Deception | [ Reply to This ]

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