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-have you ever loved someone?
and know they didnt care
-have you ever felt like crying?
but know it wont get you no where
-have you ever closed your eyes?
and said a little prayer
-have you ever looked in their heart?
and wished you were there
-have you ever watched them walk away?
and whispered "god i love you"
-so you cry all night and go insane
there is nothing in this world to cause you so much pain
-i say dont fall in love
because it hurts through and through
-i have but just one question
.::why do i love you ?::.
| This is truly a great poem! It actually made me kind of sad, I felt like I really just..felt it. There was really emotion there. I like every word in this poem, everything about it. (In the 3 line, it should be anywhere. Sorry I'm picky about literature and all that. Theres my flaw.lol) I think i'm going to add this one to my favorites. You did an awesome job. I'm staring to really like your work!|
|| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ] || it was a beautiful poem as allways I really enjoy it ..and I like the way you end it ...good job thank you||| Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ] || That is such a sad poem.|
The words you use really make me feel for the person in the poem.
I really like the structure of it: like the way every second poem starts with a -
and the way the first half consists of questions.
It is a really good poem.
|| Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by syrekata | [ Reply to This ] || I think it's smashing. I'm there right now, so I'm really feeling it. I like the almost bleak, melancholy approach to what is usually a happy subject. I'd love to read more.||| Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ] || Wow! I felt the emontion! Great work! I loved it and could relate! I don't know how I would critique it but I must so... I think that maybe you should add a little more of how she/he loved him/her. Like you skipped from being third person to first. But it was still great all the same.||| Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by hurley09 | [ Reply to This ] || This was really good it had very true emotions this is very relatable. I know that personally I've watched my gf or someone I like walk away and be like God I love them, I cna relate to the pain you talk about love bring cause I have been hurt many times. The last few lines summed the poem up very well it was just great|
|| Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ] || I like your style of writing. You portray quite an awareness and your writing seems to stretch beyond the norm. I feel you have a lot of talent, make sure you continue to develop this.|
Be mindful though of mixing rhyme and non-rhyme.
|| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ] || oh my goth!this reminds me so much of my lyfe right now.this is a luffly poem.i loved yer style of writing and the way you organized this write.great write.keep it up.||| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ] |