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    dots Submission Name: A Trophy On A Shelfdots
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    Author: Ria
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Just another stranger
    Added to my list
    Protecting me from danger
    The ones I will always miss.

    Daddy Dearest look at me,
    See who I have become
    All the pain that I cannot flee
    Has made me feel so numb.

    Mommy your soul is lost in my heart
    But your body remains in tact
    This time that we have been apart
    Has left me alone with what I have lacked.

    Everyone close to me goes away
    And I have to fend for myself
    Yet still here I am on display
    Like a trophy on a shelf.





    Submitted on 2006-02-25 16:49:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A good read but I would re-work some of the middle verses. The ones that are at the starting sound like they are going to end. The last verse is right on the money and this poem is a great idea. Keep up the good work, you are on your way...

    :))
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Ravensworth | [ Reply to This ]



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